Shoes— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不清晰的问题，建议加强语法基础，避免重复和不连贯的句子。可以尝试用简单明了的句子表达购买鞋子的频率和原因。

例: Yes, I like buying shoes because they help me change my style and make me feel more confident. I usually buy about four pairs a year, mostly when my old shoes wear out or when I find a style I like.

提案: 回答中有语法错误和表达不清晰，部分句子难以理解。建议练习使用正确的时态和句子结构，避免使用不相关或错误的词汇。

例: Yes, I have bought shoes online because it saves me a lot of time since I am busy. There are many options available, which makes shopping easier, but sometimes I prefer to try shoes on before buying.

提案: 回答中有语法和用词错误，表达不够清晰。建议使用更准确的词汇描述价格和鞋子的质量，并避免无关词汇。

例: I usually spend about CN¥800 on a pair of shoes because I believe this price can get good quality and nice design. For example, last year I bought a pair of sports shoes that were expensive but very comfortable.

提案: 回答中语法错误较多，表达不连贯，部分词汇使用不当。建议加强语法和词汇的准确性，清晰表达个人偏好和理由。

例: I prefer fashionable shoes because I am very interested in fashion. I like to follow trends and express my own style. Although comfortable shoes are nice, fashionable shoes make me feel more confident and happy.

× Yes, I often buy shoes because they can change my style and made me feel more confident.

✓ Yes, I often buy shoes because they can change my style and make me feel more confident.

这里的动词时态不一致，前面用的是一般现在时，后面却用了过去式'made'，应保持时态一致，使用一般现在时'make'。

× I don't know by then it will often maybe around 4 * a year.

✓ I don't know, but maybe around 4 times a year.

短语中'by then'用法不当，应使用'but'表示转折，且'4 * a year'表达不规范，应改为'4 times a year'。

× Usually when my older ones wear out.

✓ Usually when my older ones wear out.

该句不完整，缺少主语和谓语，建议补充完整句子，如'I usually buy new shoes when my older ones wear out.'。

× All when I find her appear.

✓ Also, when I find a pair I like, I buy them.

原句结构混乱，语义不清，需重组句子使其通顺且表达明确。

× I really like it, it's always feel great.

✓ I really like them; they always feel great.

'it'指代复数鞋子应使用复数代词'them'，且谓语动词应与主语一致，'feel'前应加复数主语'they'。

× Yes I do, I like buying shoes online because I am quite busy and it's save me a lot of time.

✓ Yes, I do. I like buying shoes online because I am quite busy and it saves me a lot of time.

'it's save'中缺少第三人称单数动词形式，应为'saves'。

× There are always many my choice online which make me shopping easier but sometimes I steal ghost stories if they I really need to try them on.

✓ There are always many choices online which make shopping easier, but sometimes I worry about fake products, so I really need to try them on.

'many my choice'表达错误，应为'many choices'；'steal ghost stories'不合适，推测为'worried about fake products'；句子结构混乱，需调整使其通顺。

× I usually spend about CN¥800 of a pair of shoes.

✓ I usually spend about CN¥800 on a pair of shoes.

动词'spend'后应接介词'on'表示花费在某物上，'of'用法错误。

× I remember buying a pair of storage shoes last year which worth quality.

✓ I remember buying a pair of sturdy shoes last year which were of good quality.

'storage shoes'应为'sturdy shoes'；'which worth quality'结构错误，应为'which were of good quality'。

× Expensive but very comfortable to wear.

✓ They were expensive but very comfortable to wear.

句子缺少主语，应补充完整。

× I really like Zen.

✓ I really like them.

'Zen'可能为误写，应为指代鞋子，使用复数代词'them'更合适。

× I prefer fashionable shoes because I'm very interesting in fashion.

✓ I prefer fashionable shoes because I'm very interested in fashion.

'interesting'是形容词，表示令人感兴趣的；此处应使用过去分词形式'interested'表示感兴趣的状态。

× I like to follow tried and experience my own stay.

✓ I like to follow trends and express my own style.

原句表达不清，'tried and experience my own stay'语法错误，改为更合适的表达。

× Comfortable shoes are nice, but I enjoy the shoes that likely stay leash more wear.

✓ Comfortable shoes are nice, but I enjoy shoes that last longer.

'likely stay leash more wear'表达错误，应为'last longer'表示耐穿。

× Fashionable shoes make me feel confident and experience and delighted.

✓ Fashionable shoes make me feel confident and delighted.

'experience'用法错误，句中不需要该词，删去即可。