Shoes— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn cần tránh lặp từ và sử dụng ngữ pháp chính xác hơn. Bạn nên nói rõ ràng, tránh sử dụng từ không cần thiết như "umm" và chú ý đến số nhiều của danh từ (ví dụ: "shoes are basic items" thay vì "shoes is a basic items"). Ngoài ra, hãy sử dụng câu ngắn gọn, mạch lạc và có liên kết logic giữa các ý.

例: Yes, I like buying shoes because they are essential for everyone. Since I am a big fan of football, I usually buy football shoes. However, I don't buy them very often because they are quite expensive and I can't afford to buy them frequently.

提案: Bạn nên chú ý đến cách sử dụng từ và ngữ pháp, ví dụ "quiet" nên là "quite" và câu cần rõ ràng hơn. Hãy sử dụng các liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp như "easily on only available". Ngoài ra, hãy cung cấp thêm chi tiết cụ thể để làm câu trả lời phong phú hơn.

例: Yes, I have bought shoes online several times. Because I need specialized football shoes that are quite expensive and often only available on international websites like Adidas or Nike, buying online is the most convenient option for me.

提案: Bạn nên sử dụng từ đúng nghĩa, ví dụ "baguette" không phù hợp, nên dùng "budget". Câu trả lời cần rõ ràng và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp. Hãy trình bày ý tưởng một cách mạch lạc, sử dụng liên từ để kết nối các ý và cung cấp thông tin cụ thể hơn về số tiền hoặc tần suất mua.

例: As a student, I don't have a large budget for shoes. I usually buy them only when I have saved enough money because high-quality or branded shoes are quite expensive. Therefore, I try to spend more money on shoes only when it is necessary.

提案: Bạn nên tránh lặp từ và sử dụng từ chính xác hơn, ví dụ "comfortability" nên là "comfort". Câu trả lời cần mạch lạc, có cấu trúc rõ ràng với câu chủ đề và các câu bổ sung. Hãy sử dụng liên từ để câu trả lời trôi chảy và cung cấp lý do cụ thể hơn cho sự lựa chọn của bạn.

例: I prefer comfortable shoes because comfort is very important to me. They provide a sense of relaxation, which is especially beneficial since I do a lot of sports. Therefore, I always choose comfort over fashion when buying shoes.

× I, I think shoes is a basic items and really essential for every pupils.

✓ I think shoes are basic items and really essential for every pupil.

The noun 'shoes' is plural, so the verb should be 'are' instead of 'is'. Also, 'items' should be plural without 'a' and 'pupils' should be singular 'pupil' after 'every'.

× it's cost a lot and I can't afford it frequently.

✓ it costs a lot and I can't afford it frequently.

The verb 'cost' needs an 's' in the third person singular present tense to agree with the subject 'it'.

× Since I'm a big fan of footballs, I often need specialized shoes which are quiet and costly and easily on only available on international websites like Adidas or Nike.

✓ Since I'm a big fan of football, I often need specialized shoes which are quite costly and only available on international websites like Adidas or Nike.

'Football' is uncountable here, so 'footballs' is incorrect. Also, 'quiet' should be 'quite' and 'easily on only available' is incorrect word order; corrected to 'only available'.

× which are quiet and costly and easily on only available on international websites like Adidas or Nike.

✓ which are quite costly and only available on international websites like Adidas or Nike.

The adverb 'only' should be placed before 'available' to correctly modify it. 'Easily on' is incorrect and removed.

× Since I'm a large, I'm a student, I don't have large baguette for shoes.

✓ Since I'm a student, I don't have a large budget for shoes.

'Large' is incorrectly used before 'baguette' (which is a type of bread). The correct word is 'budget' and it needs the article 'a'.

× I usually buy them only when I have saved in the money, because you know, those are quite expensive, essential for the high quality or branded ones.

✓ I usually buy them only when I have saved the money, because you know, those are quite expensive, especially the high quality or branded ones.

The preposition 'in' is unnecessary after 'saved'. Also, 'essential for' is incorrect here; 'especially' fits better to indicate emphasis.

× the the my the most preference is feelings.

✓ my main preference is feelings.

The phrase contains redundant and incorrect pronouns and articles. 'My main preference' is the correct form.

× because it's bring me a sense of relaxation and comfortability.

✓ because it brings me a sense of relaxation and comfort.

The verb 'bring' should be 'brings' to agree with 'it'. 'Comfortability' is not commonly used; 'comfort' is the correct noun.