Shoes— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不清晰的问题，且有重复和停顿，建议简化句子结构，避免重复，表达更自然流畅。

例: I usually buy shoes about twice a year. I prefer to keep it simple by choosing one or two pairs that I really like, so I don't spend too much time deciding.

提案: 回答中有重复和不完整的句子，表达不够连贯，建议使用连词连接句子，避免重复，完整表达观点。

例: Yes, I often buy shoes online because it's economical and offers a wide variety of options, which makes it easier to find what I want.

提案: 回答语法混乱，表达不清晰，建议使用完整句子，明确说明花费金额和原因，避免重复。

例: I usually spend around 500 yuan on shoes. Since I am a student, I prefer economical options rather than expensive ones.

提案: 回答不完整且含糊，缺乏具体细节和连贯性，建议明确表达偏好并给出理由，使用连词连接句子。

例: I prefer a mix of fashionable and comfortable shoes because I need stylish shoes for special occasions and comfortable ones for daily wear.

× I really like to buy your shoes.

✓ I really like to buy shoes.

这里的“your shoes”不合适，应该用复数名词“shoes”表示一般的鞋子，而不是特指“你的鞋子”。

× I'm a. Person who usually like to make things easy, so I just choose one or two shoes as my best choice so I don't need to spend too much time on it.

✓ I'm a person who usually likes to make things easy, so I just choose one or two pairs of shoes as my best choice so I don't need to spend too much time on it.

“Person”是单数，谓语动词应使用第三人称单数形式“likes”。“one or two shoes”应改为“one or two pairs of shoes”，因为鞋子成对出现。

× the online shopping online is so popular now.

✓ online shopping is so popular now.

“the online shopping online”中“the”和重复的“online”使用不当，应去掉“the”和重复的“online”。

× I usually like to buy shoes online because it's really economical and has a lot of a great range of shoes so I can.

✓ I usually like to buy shoes online because it's really economical and has a great range of shoes.

“a lot of a great range”中“a lot of”和“a”重复，应去掉“a lot of”。句子末尾“so I can”不完整，应删除。

× Basically I think probably 500 and just buy shoes or economical and not so expensive because I'm a student I don't need so much money to buy it so it's not so high.

✓ Basically, I think probably 500 yuan to just buy shoes that are economical and not so expensive because I'm a student. I don't need to spend so much money on them, so the cost is not so high.

句子结构混乱，缺少连贯性。需要补充货币单位“yuan”，并调整句子使其通顺。

× I don't need so much money to buy it so it's not so high.

✓ I don't need so much money to buy them, so the cost is not so high.

“it”指代不明确，鞋子是复数，应使用“them”。

× Uh, it's raining mix.

✓ Uh, it's a mixed feeling.

“it's raining mix”表达不正确，应改为“it's a mixed feeling”或类似表达。

× I need them to umm, I need to wear them in different.

✓ I need them because I wear them in different situations.

句子不完整且结构混乱，应补充完整表达。

× Uh, OK, I like to wear comfortable shoes in.

✓ Uh, OK, I like to wear comfortable shoes indoors.

句子不完整，缺少地点状语，补充“indoors”使句子完整。