Shoes— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答有點不流暢且有些語法錯誤，建議你在回答時先直接回答問題，然後用一兩句話具體說明原因，避免使用不確定的語氣詞如 "I think" 太多。

例: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes and usually do so every two to three months because I believe shoes can enhance my outfit and serve as a stylish accessory.

提案: 回答中有明顯錯誤（"I'm a dog"），且用詞不當（"wash the size"），建議你回答時要注意用詞準確，並且用連接詞使句子更流暢。

例: Yes, I usually buy shoes online because it is very convenient. Moreover, I can easily check the size and color options to choose exactly what I want.

提案: 你的回答有點重複且語法不夠正確，建議你用更簡潔且正確的句子表達，並且避免重複相同意思的詞語。

例: I usually spend around 2000 to 3000 because this price range is affordable for me and the quality is generally good enough.

提案: 回答中有語法錯誤（"didn't really fit" 應用現在時），且句子結構不夠清晰，建議你用正確時態並用連接詞使句子更連貫。

例: I prefer comfortable shoes because fashionable ones often do not fit well. Also, comfortable shoes are more important to me, and fashionable shoes can be quite expensive.

× About two to three months.

✓ About every two to three months.

The phrase 'About two to three months' lacks a preposition to indicate frequency. Adding 'every' clarifies that the action happens approximately every two to three months.

× I think it's kind of accessory.

✓ I think it's a kind of accessory.

The sentence misses the article 'a' before 'kind of accessory'. In English, 'kind of' is usually followed by an article and a noun.

× Uh, since I'm a dog, I seldom go to offline shop to buy shoes and more often buy shoes online.

✓ Uh, since I'm a busy person, I seldom go to offline shops to buy shoes and more often buy shoes online.

The phrase 'I'm a dog' is incorrect and likely a mispronunciation or misuse. Also, 'offline shop' should be plural 'offline shops' to match general meaning.

× I can wash the size, wash the color, and choose what I want exactly.

✓ I can check the size, check the color, and choose exactly what I want.

The verb 'wash' is incorrect here; the intended meaning is likely 'check' or 'look at'. Also, 'choose what I want exactly' is better as 'choose exactly what I want' for natural word order.

× I usually spend about 2000 to 3000 approximately.

✓ I usually spend about 2000 to 3000 approximately units of currency.

The sentence lacks a unit of currency after the numbers, which is necessary for clarity. Also, 'about' and 'approximately' are redundant; one should be used.

× I think in this range is not too expensive but also not too cheap that I will afraid the qua quality is not so good.

✓ I think this range is not too expensive but also not too cheap, so I am not afraid that the quality is poor.

The sentence has several issues: 'in this range' should be 'this range'; 'that I will afraid' is incorrect, should be 'so I am not afraid'; 'qua quality' is a typo for 'quality'; 'not so good' is better expressed as 'poor'.

× I think fashionable shoes sometimes didn't really fit my feet, so I would choose to buy comfortable shoes.

✓ I think fashionable shoes sometimes don't really fit my feet, so I choose to buy comfortable shoes.

The question is in present tense, so 'didn't' should be 'don't' to match present tense. Also, 'would choose' implies conditional, but simple present 'choose' fits better here.

× I think comfortable is the most important issues to me.

✓ I think comfort is the most important issue to me.

'Comfortable' is an adjective; the noun form 'comfort' is needed here. Also, 'issues' should be singular 'issue' to match 'most important'.

× And yeah, fashionable shoes are often quite expensive that I can afford it.

✓ And yeah, fashionable shoes are often quite expensive, so I cannot afford them.

The sentence is contradictory; 'expensive that I can afford it' is incorrect. It should express inability to afford, and 'it' should be 'them' to refer to plural 'shoes'.