Shoes— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答较为自然且内容完整，但句子结构稍显复杂且有语法错误，如“replace old one”应为“replace old ones”。建议简化句子结构，注意单复数一致，并适当使用连接词使表达更流畅。

例: I don't buy shoes very often because I think having three or four pairs is enough for me. Therefore, I usually shop for shoes two or three times a year to replace old ones or when I find something I really like.

提案: 回答表达了原因和习惯，但存在语法错误，如“always shopping”应为“always shop”，且“happy academic workload”用词不当。建议使用更准确的词汇，注意动词形式，并避免多余词汇。

例: Yes, I have bought shoes online. Since I am a student with a heavy academic workload and lots of homework, I don't have much free time to go shopping. Therefore, I always shop online to buy shoes and clothes.

提案: 回答内容具体，但表达不够自然，存在语法错误，如“some shoes so expensive”应为“shoes that are too expensive”，时态错误“changed”应为“changes”。建议注意词汇搭配和时态一致。

例: I usually spend around 200 to 300 Chinese yuan on shoes. I don't like buying shoes that are too expensive because I think I will replace them eventually, and shoe fashion changes rapidly.

提案: 回答表达了观点和原因，但句子较长且有语法错误，如“it looks”应为“they look”，“some shoes which are comfortable”可简化。建议简化句子结构，注意主谓一致，并使用连接词增强逻辑性。

例: In the past, I preferred buying fashionable shoes because they look beautiful. However, now I prefer comfortable shoes because comfort is very important when I attend lectures and classes.

× I don't prefer to buy shoes very often because I think having 3 or 4 pairs is sufficient for me, so I only shop for shoes two or three times a year to replace old one or I find something I really like.

✓ I don't prefer to buy shoes very often because I think having 3 or 4 pairs is sufficient for me, so I only shop for shoes two or three times a year to replace old ones or when I find something I really like.

这里的“old one”应为复数形式“old ones”，因为前文提到的是多双鞋，替换时也应是复数。

× Therefore I always shopping online to buy some shoes and some clothes.

✓ Therefore I always shop online to buy some shoes and some clothes.

“always”后面应接动词原形“shop”，而不是动名词“shopping”。

× I don't like buying some shoes so expensive because I think I will replace them one day and the fashion of shoes changed rapidly.

✓ I don't like buying shoes that are so expensive because I think I will replace them one day and the fashion of shoes changes rapidly.

“some shoes so expensive”表达不准确，应改为“shoes that are so expensive”来修饰鞋子价格高。

× ...and the fashion of shoes changed rapidly.

✓ ...and the fashion of shoes changes rapidly.

这里描述的是鞋子时尚的普遍现象，应使用一般现在时“changes”，而非过去时“changed”。

× In the past years, I preferred buying fashionable shoes because it looks so beautiful, but now I like buying some shoes which are comfortable because comfort is a significant standard for me to attend some lectures and classes.

✓ In the past years, I preferred buying fashionable shoes because they look so beautiful, but now I like buying shoes which are comfortable because comfort is a significant standard for me to attend lectures and classes.

“fashionable shoes”是复数，指代时应使用复数代词“they”，而非“it”。此外，“some shoes”可简化为“shoes”，更自然。