Shoes— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn thiếu sự tự nhiên và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp, khiến ý không rõ ràng. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi, sử dụng cấu trúc câu đơn giản, tránh lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng không phù hợp. Hãy cố gắng sử dụng câu ngắn gọn, rõ ràng và đúng ngữ pháp.

例: Yes, I like buying shoes very much. I usually buy new shoes once a month because I enjoy having different styles.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn thiếu sự mạch lạc và có nhiều từ không phù hợp hoặc không đúng ngữ cảnh. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp, sử dụng từ vựng phù hợp và câu có cấu trúc rõ ràng. Hãy thêm liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

例: Yes, I often buy shoes online because it is convenient. However, I am sometimes worried about the quality of the shoes I receive.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn không rõ ràng và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp, sử dụng câu đơn giản và từ vựng phù hợp để diễn đạt ý. Hãy cố gắng nói rõ số tiền hoặc mức chi tiêu trung bình và lý do.

例: It depends on the quality of the shoes I want to buy. I prefer high-quality shoes, so I usually spend a lot of money on them.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn khá rõ ràng nhưng có một số lỗi nhỏ và từ không phù hợp (ví dụ: 'soup' thay vì 'shoes'). Bạn nên luyện tập phát âm và sử dụng từ vựng chính xác hơn. Hãy sử dụng liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

例: I prefer comfortable shoes because they make me feel good. However, I usually choose simple shoes that are still fashionable.

× Often I very like shopping suits because I think shoes is one of a humans, umm, fundamental objects.

✓ I very often like shopping for shoes because I think shoes are one of the fundamental objects for humans.

The adverb 'often' should be placed before the main verb 'like' for correct emphasis. Also, 'shopping suits' is incorrect; it should be 'shopping for shoes'. 'Shoes is' is a singular verb with a plural noun; it should be 'shoes are'. 'One of a humans' is incorrect; it should be 'one of the fundamental objects for humans'.

× Often I very like shopping suits because I think shoes is one of a humans, umm, fundamental objects.

✓ I very often like shopping for shoes because I think shoes are one of the fundamental objects for humans.

The noun 'shoes' is plural, so the verb should be 'are' instead of 'is'. Also, 'a humans' is incorrect because 'humans' is plural; it should be 'humans' without 'a'.

× I often buy for one time a month.

✓ I often buy once a month.

The phrase 'buy for one time a month' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'buy once a month'. 'For' is unnecessary here.

× Yes, episodes in uh, now what day does shopping online is very chance.

✓ Yes, nowadays shopping online is very common.

The original sentence is unclear and ungrammatical. 'Episodes in uh, now what day does' is incorrect and should be replaced with 'nowadays'. 'Very chance' is incorrect; 'very common' is appropriate.

× So I often buy suit online, although there are many, uh, conscious about the quality of those shoes.

✓ So I often buy shoes online, although many people are concerned about the quality of those shoes.

'Suit' should be plural 'shoes' to match the context. 'Conscious' is an adjective and used incorrectly; it should be 'concerned' to describe people's feelings.

× Is the depend on the what is what is fee the quality of the suit that I want to buy?

✓ It depends on the quality of the shoes that I want to buy.

The original sentence is ungrammatical and confusing. 'Is the depend on the what is what is fee' is incorrect. The correct structure is 'It depends on the quality of the shoes that I want to buy.'

× I very like the high quality shoes so I spend much money to buy shoes.

✓ I really like high-quality shoes, so I spend a lot of money to buy shoes.

'Very like' is incorrect; 'really like' is correct. 'High quality shoes' should be hyphenated as 'high-quality shoes'. 'Spend much money' is incorrect in affirmative sentences; 'spend a lot of money' is correct.

× I prefer comfortable shoes because the comfort makes the makes my feelings so good.

✓ I prefer comfortable shoes because comfort makes me feel good.

The phrase 'the comfort makes the makes my feelings so good' is incorrect. It should be 'comfort makes me feel good'. 'Feelings so good' is awkward; 'feel good' is natural.

× I often choose the soup that is very, uh, simple, but it's still fashionable.

✓ I often choose shoes that are very simple, but still fashionable.

'Soup' is incorrect; it should be 'shoes'. Also, 'that is' should be 'that are' to agree with plural 'shoes'.