Shoes— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答は内容がやや冗長で、文法的な誤りもあります。例えば、「shoes are stylish and attractive」は質問の答えとして不自然で、理由の説明も繰り返しが多いです。より簡潔で自然な表現を心がけ、文法の正確さを向上させましょう。

例: I like buying shoes, but I don't do it often because they are usually expensive and I am a university student with a limited budget.

提案: 回答が長くて分かりにくく、文法的な誤りや不自然な表現が多いです。例えば、「the shoes delivered my house differ from what I expected」や「what hurts them in a physical store stores」は意味が伝わりにくいです。もっと簡潔で明確な表現を使い、論理的に話を展開しましょう。

例: No, I have never bought shoes online because I prefer to try them on in a store to make sure they fit well and look good.

提案: 回答に文法の誤りがあり、内容も少し混乱しています。例えば、「it lasts longer and more comfortable and suits my book size」は不自然です。具体的で正確な表現を使い、文を簡潔にまとめることが大切です。

例: I usually spend over a550,000 on a pair because I prefer durable and comfortable shoes that fit my foot size well.

提案: 回答は比較的明確ですが、文法の誤り（"a shoe that meet"は"meets"）や繰り返し（"I I"）があります。より正確な文法を使い、自然な表現にしましょう。

例: I want shoes that are both fashionable and comfortable, but if I have to choose, I prefer fashionable shoes because I like to look stylish.

× Shoes tend to be expensive and it is difficult for me to buy it very often because I'm a university student so I don't make much money.

✓ Shoes tend to be expensive and it is difficult for me to buy them very often because I'm a university student so I don't make much money.

The pronoun 'it' is singular, but it refers to 'shoes', which is plural. Therefore, the correct pronoun should be 'them' to agree in number with the plural noun 'shoes'.

× No, I have never bought shoes online because I think buying shoes online can lead to the implication that the shoes delivered my house differ from what I expected or what I imagined before and I want to see what hurts them in a physical store stores when purchasing.

✓ No, I have never bought shoes online because I think buying shoes online can lead to the situation where the shoes delivered to my house differ from what I expected or imagined before, and I want to see how they fit in a physical store when purchasing.

The original sentence has unclear and incorrect phrasing such as 'the implication that the shoes delivered my house' and 'what hurts them'. These phrases are grammatically incorrect and confusing. The correction clarifies the meaning by using 'the situation where the shoes delivered to my house differ' and 'how they fit', which are appropriate expressions in this context.

× Most of the shoes that attract me are very expensive, so I usually spend over over ¥50,000 on a pair, but I prefer to buy expensive but durable shoes rather than cheap ones because it lasts longer and more comfortable and suits my book size.

✓ Most of the shoes that attract me are very expensive, so I usually spend over ¥50,000 on a pair, but I prefer to buy expensive but durable shoes rather than cheap ones because they last longer, are more comfortable, and suit my foot size.

The pronoun 'it' is singular but refers to 'shoes', which is plural, so it should be 'they'. Also, 'lasts' should be 'last' to agree with the plural subject 'shoes'. 'More comfortable' needs the verb 'are' before it. 'Book size' is incorrect; the correct term is 'foot size'.

× I really want to choose a shoe that meet both requirements, but if I had to choose one, I would choose fashionable shoes because I I want to be stylish.

✓ I really want to choose a shoe that meets both requirements, but if I had to choose one, I would choose fashionable shoes because I want to be stylish.

The verb 'meet' should be 'meets' to agree with the singular subject 'a shoe'. Also, the repeated 'I' is a typographical error and should be removed.