Shoes— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer wa shizen de, shitsumon ni chokusetsu kotaete imasu ga, futsuu no eigo no riyou to shite wa sukoshi fukuzatsu na bunshou to shite wa jikan ga nagasugiru kamoshiremasen. Motto kantan de, rikai shi yasui kotoba o tsukatte, setsumei o shousai ni shite kudasai.

例: Yes, I like buying shoes. I usually buy shoes from the Nike store once a month because I want to follow the latest trends. I enjoy having new shoes that look good.

提案: Kantan de wakari yasui kotoba o tsukatte imasu ga, "look up to look for" no you na fukuzatsu na hyougen wa fukuzatsu sugiru tame, motto shizen de tadashii hyougen o tsukatte kudasai. Mata, rikai o fukameru tame ni, riyuu ya taiken o motto kuwashiku setsumei shite kudasai.

例: Yes, I have bought shoes online, especially from Amazon. It was very convenient because I could easily find the shoes I liked. I would like to buy shoes online again in the future.

提案: Kantan na bunshou de kotaete imasu ga, "another my personal interests" no you na fukuzatsu na hyougen wa fukuzatsu de, tadashii eigo ni shite kudasai. Mata, riyuu o motto shousai ni shite, setsumei o fukameru koto ga taisetsu desu.

例: I usually spend about 5,000 to 10,000 yen on shoes. I try to save money because I want to spend on other hobbies, like traveling.

提案: Kotae wa chokusetsu desuga, setsumei ga fukuzatsu de, bunpou no machigai mo arimasu. Motto wakari yasui kotoba de, rikai o fukameru tame ni, riyuu o shousai ni setsumei shite kudasai. Mata, fukuzatsu na hyougen wa saisho wa sakete kudasai.

例: I prefer fashionable shoes because I like to look good when I go out with my friends. However, sometimes my shoes get dirty, so I also wear comfortable shoes at times.

× I often buy my favorite shoes in Nike store every month because I want to keep up with the latest trend of shoes.

✓ I often buy my favorite shoes at the Nike store every month because I want to keep up with the latest trend of shoes.

In English, we use 'at' to indicate a specific store location rather than 'in'. Also, 'the' is needed before 'Nike store' because it is a specific place. So, 'at the Nike store' is correct.

× It was very convenient to look up to look for my favorable shoes.

✓ It was very convenient to look for my favorite shoes.

The phrase 'look up to look for' is redundant and incorrect. 'Look for' is the correct verb phrase to express searching. Also, 'favorable' is incorrect here; 'favorite' is the correct adjective to express preference.

× I want to use it again in the future.

✓ I want to use it again in the future.

This sentence is grammatically correct; no correction needed.

× I spend maybe ¥5000 or ¥10,000 on my shoes.

✓ I spend maybe ¥5,000 or ¥10,000 on my shoes.

Numbers should be written with commas for thousands in English to improve readability. Also, 'maybe' is acceptable here but could be better placed as 'maybe ¥5,000 to ¥10,000' for clarity.

× I want to allocate my money to another my personal interests such as traveling.

✓ I want to allocate my money to my other personal interests such as traveling.

The phrase 'another my personal interests' is incorrect. 'Another' is used with singular nouns; 'other' is used with plural nouns. Also, 'my' should come before 'other personal interests'.

× when I hang out with my friends, I often take my favorite shoes and and at the time my shoes be becomes dirty because of dirty Rd.

✓ When I hang out with my friends, I often wear my favorite shoes, and at that time my shoes become dirty because of the dirty road.

'Take' is incorrect here; 'wear' is the correct verb for shoes. 'And and' is a typo and should be 'and'. 'My shoes be becomes' is incorrect; 'my shoes become' is correct. 'Dirty Rd.' should be 'the dirty road' with the definite article and full word.

× So I want to put on comfortable shoes.

✓ So I want to put on comfortable shoes.

This sentence is correct; no correction needed.