Shoes— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is generally clear and relevant, but you should avoid minor errors like 'expense' which should be 'express'. Also, try to use linking words to connect your ideas more smoothly, for example, 'because' and 'especially' are good, but you can add 'for instance' to give examples more naturally.

例: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes quite a lot because they allow me to express my personal style. For instance, I usually buy new shoes every few months, especially when there is a sale or when I need something special for work or a casual occasion.

提案: Your answer is clear and well-structured with good linking words. To improve, you could add a concluding sentence to summarize your opinion and use a wider range of vocabulary, for example, replacing 'good fit' with 'proper fit' or 'correct size'.

例: No, I haven't bought shoes online because I believe that a proper fit is very important. When buying shoes in a shop, I can try them on to make sure they are comfortable and suit my feet perfectly. This way, I avoid the risk of getting the wrong size. Therefore, I prefer shopping in physical stores.

提案: Your answer is relevant but contains some grammatical errors, such as 'a good quality shoes' which should be 'good quality shoes'. Also, try to use linking words to connect your ideas, for example, 'because' to explain why you invest in quality shoes.

例: I usually spend a moderate amount of money on shoes, typically around 100 to 500 per pair, because I prefer investing in good quality shoes that are comfortable and durable.

提案: Your answer has some unclear and incorrect phrases such as 'without paying' and 'Comfort is essential to a wash. Sore feet'. Try to express your ideas clearly and logically. Use linking words like 'because' and 'for example' properly, and avoid incomplete sentences. Also, provide a clear conclusion.

例: I prefer comfortable shoes over fashionable ones because they allow me to walk or stand for a long time without pain. For example, when I go shopping or travel, comfort is essential. Although fashionable shoes may look attractive, I believe comfort is more important.

× Yes, I enjoy buying shoes quite a lot because they allow me to expense my personal style.

✓ Yes, I enjoy buying shoes quite a lot because they allow me to express my personal style.

The verb 'expense' is incorrectly used here; the correct verb is 'express' to convey showing or demonstrating personal style. 'Expense' relates to costs, not expression.

× I usually spend a moderate amount of money on shoes, typically around 100 to 500 per pair.

✓ I usually spend a moderate amount of money on shoes, typically around 100 to 500 dollars per pair.

The sentence lacks a unit of currency after the numbers, which is necessary to clarify the amount spent. Adding 'dollars' specifies the currency and improves clarity.

× I prefer investing a good quality shoes that are comfortable and durable.

✓ I prefer investing in good quality shoes that are comfortable and durable.

The article 'a' is incorrectly used before the plural noun 'shoes'. Also, the verb 'investing' should be followed by the preposition 'in' to be grammatically correct.

× I prefer comfortable shoes over fashionable ones because they allow me to walk or stand for a long period without paying.

✓ I prefer comfortable shoes over fashionable ones because they allow me to walk or stand for a long period without pain.

The word 'paying' is incorrect in this context; the correct word is 'pain' to indicate discomfort. This is a misuse of vocabulary rather than grammar but affects sentence meaning.

× Comfort is essential to a wash. Sore feet, although fashionable shoes may look attractive, I believe.

✓ Comfort is essential to me. Although fashionable shoes may look attractive, sore feet are not worth it, I believe.

The original sentences are fragmented and unclear. The phrase 'essential to a wash' is incorrect and likely a typo. The correction restructures the sentences for clarity and grammatical correctness.