Shoes— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to make your response more natural and concise by directly answering the question and using correct sentence structures. Avoid redundancy and ensure clarity.

例: Yes, I like buying shoes, but only two to three times a year. I usually buy them when there is a new trend or a good deal available.

提案: Your answer has some hesitation and repetition. Try to speak more fluently and use linking words to make your answer coherent. Also, avoid repeating words unnecessarily and keep your sentences clear and concise.

例: Yes, I prefer buying shoes online because there are many good deals, and the return and exchange policies are very convenient nowadays.

提案: Your answer is clear but can be improved by adding linking words and more specific details. Also, try to avoid minor grammatical errors like 'very less' and use 'very little' instead.

例: I usually spend very little money on shoes because I prefer quality over quantity. Therefore, I only buy shoes when there is a great deal or when I really need them.

提案: Your answer has good ideas but contains hesitations and some unclear phrases like 'face number shoes'. Try to speak more confidently and use correct vocabulary. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

例: I prefer comfortable shoes rather than fashionable ones because comfort is more important for walking properly. However, my choice depends on the occasion.

× I buy shoes 2 to 3 * a year when there is a new trend ensues where I find good deal in shoes so I buy occasionally.

✓ I buy shoes 2 to 3 times a year when a new trend ensues and I find a good deal on shoes, so I buy occasionally.

The original sentence has a singular/plural mismatch and missing quantifiers. '2 to 3 * a year' is unclear and should be '2 to 3 times a year' to indicate frequency. 'a new trend ensues' is correct but needs better connection with the next clause using 'and'. 'good deal in shoes' should be 'a good deal on shoes' because 'deal' is singular and requires an article 'a', and the correct preposition is 'on' for deals related to products. These corrections improve clarity and grammatical accuracy.

× I prefer to buy shoes online because I think there is a, there are lot, lot of deals online and the policies of return and exchange are very good online on online platform nowadays.

✓ I prefer to buy shoes online because I think there are lots and lots of deals online and the policies of return and exchange are very good on online platforms nowadays.

The sentence incorrectly mixes singular and plural forms. 'there is a, there are lot, lot of deals' is incorrect; it should be 'there are lots and lots of deals' to correctly use plural form and quantifiers. Also, 'on online platform' should be plural 'on online platforms' to match the context. These changes correct number agreement and improve fluency.

× I spend very less money on shoes because I prefer quality over quantity.

✓ I spend very little money on shoes because I prefer quality over quantity.

'Very less money' is incorrect; the correct quantifier is 'very little money' when referring to uncountable nouns like 'money'. This correction improves grammatical accuracy and naturalness.

× If you don't have comfortable shoes, how can you walk properly?

✓ If you don't have comfortable shoes, how can you walk properly?

This sentence is grammatically correct with no singular/plural issues.

× So I think it's better to invest in comfortable shoes rather on face number shoes.

✓ So I think it's better to invest in comfortable shoes rather than fancy shoes.

The phrase 'rather on face number shoes' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'rather than fancy shoes'. 'Rather than' is the correct conjunction to compare preferences, and 'fancy' is the appropriate adjective here. This correction fixes preposition and word choice errors.