Shoes— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat clear but could be more natural and structured. Avoid filler words like 'uh' and try to directly answer the question with a clear topic sentence. Also, provide more specific details about how often you buy shoes and why.

例: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes, especially for basketball. Since I play frequently, I usually buy new sports shoes every few months to ensure good performance and comfort.

提案: Your answer has some grammar and vocabulary errors, and the sentence is not very clear. Avoid filler words and use correct verb forms. Also, explain why buying online is convenient and mention specific benefits.

例: Yes, I usually buy shoes online because it is very convenient. Online stores often offer discounts and a wide variety of options, which makes shopping easier.

提案: Your answer lacks clarity and contains grammatical mistakes. Be specific about the currency and clarify your points. Avoid filler words and try to provide more detailed information about your spending habits.

例: I usually spend between 100 and 200 dollars on a pair of shoes. Sometimes, I wait for seasonal sales to get a better price.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to clearly state your preference and explain your reasons using linking words. Avoid filler words and redundant phrases.

例: I mostly prefer comfortable shoes because I wear them for long periods. However, I also like fashionable shoes as long as they are comfortable.

× I used to like, uh, buying shoes for sports.

✓ I used to like, uh, buying shoes for sports.

No correction needed here as 'buying' is correctly used as a gerund after 'like'. The sentence is grammatically correct.

× I play basketball a lot so I often change my shoes only for sport.

✓ I play basketball a lot so I often change my shoes only for sports.

The word 'sport' should be plural 'sports' because it refers to the general category of athletic activities. 'Sports' is the correct plural form used in this context.

× Yes, I usually bow shoes by getting online.

✓ Yes, I usually buy shoes online.

The verb 'bow' is incorrect here; the correct verb is 'buy'. Also, 'by getting online' is awkward; 'online' alone suffices to indicate the method of purchase.

× There are lots of convenient and uh, also discount from online.

✓ There are lots of conveniences and also discounts online.

'Convenient' is an adjective; the noun form 'conveniences' is needed here. 'Discount' should be plural 'discounts' to match 'lots of'. 'From online' is incorrect; 'online' alone is the correct prepositional phrase.

× Usually I spend 100 to 200 for per shoes and uh, they maybe get discounted from a specific year.

✓ Usually I spend 100 to 200 per pair of shoes, and they may get discounted during a specific season.

'For per shoes' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'per pair of shoes'. 'Maybe' should be 'may' for possibility. 'From a specific year' is awkward; 'during a specific season' or 'at certain times' is more natural for discounts.

× I prefer mostly, uh, comfortable shoes, but it also want I also want some like fancy shoes based on the comfortable as well.

✓ I mostly prefer comfortable shoes, but I also want some fancy shoes that are comfortable as well.

'It also want' is incorrect; the subject 'I' should be used with 'want'. The phrase 'based on the comfortable' is unclear; 'that are comfortable' is the correct relative clause. The sentence structure is improved for clarity.