Shoes— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中语法和表达不够自然，句子结构混乱，建议简化句子，避免重复，使用连贯的表达方式。可以先直接回答问题，再用具体细节支持。

例: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes and usually purchase a new pair every two months. I like to keep up with the latest trends, so I often choose stylish shoes that match my outfits.

提案: 表达较为清晰，但句子结构和用词有待改进。建议使用更自然的表达，注意时态和语法，避免重复。

例: I rarely buy shoes online because I'm worried about choosing the wrong size. For instance, once I bought sports shoes online without realizing their sizes differ from casual shoes, so they didn't fit me well.

提案: 回答内容较完整，但表达稍显生硬。建议使用更自然的连接词和表达方式，使回答更流畅。

例: I usually spend between 3000 and 5000 NT dollars on shoes because I think fashion trends affect their prices. For example, when a style becomes popular, demand rises and so does the price.

提案: 回答不完整且表达不够清晰。建议简洁明了地表达观点，避免语法错误，并补充完整的例子。

例: I prefer shoes that are both fashionable and comfortable because they keep my feet relaxed and match my outfits. For example, I like the brand Echoes Zuka because their shoes offer good support and stylish designs.

× I really enjoy buying shoes and I buy shoes every two months is for example.

✓ I really enjoy buying shoes and I buy shoes every two months, for example.

句子中“is for example”用法不正确，应该用逗号连接“for example”作为插入语，表示举例说明。

× The trend is usually goes on and I need some popular things on my feet so I would prefer to buy a new one and which is stylish from my outfit.

✓ The trend usually goes on and I need some popular things on my feet, so I would prefer to buy a new one which is stylish with my outfit.

主语是单数“trend”，谓语动词应为“goes”，去掉多余的“is”。“which is stylish from my outfit”应改为“which is stylish with my outfit”，介词用法错误。

× The trend is usually goes on and I need some popular things on my feet so I would prefer to buy a new one and which is stylish from my outfit.

✓ The trend usually goes on and I need some popular things on my feet, so I would prefer to buy a new one which is stylish with my outfit.

“stylish from my outfit”中的介词“from”用法错误，应使用“with”表示搭配。

× I have seldom bought shoes online because I'm afraid of buying a wrong size.

✓ I have seldom bought shoes online because I'm afraid of buying the wrong size.

“a wrong size”应使用特指的“the wrong size”，因为这里指的是具体的错误尺码。

× For example, I have got a bad experience to buy shoes online and I don't know the sport shoes and casual shoes have different size so I got a wrong size.

✓ For example, I have had a bad experience buying shoes online and I didn't know that sports shoes and casual shoes have different sizes, so I got the wrong size.

“have got a bad experience to buy”结构不正确，应改为“have had a bad experience buying”。“sport shoes”应为复数“sports shoes”。“different size”应为复数“different sizes”。“a wrong size”应为“the wrong size”。

× For example, I have got a bad experience to buy shoes online and I don't know the sport shoes and casual shoes have different size so I got a wrong size.

✓ For example, I have had a bad experience buying shoes online and I didn't know that sports shoes and casual shoes have different sizes, so I got the wrong size.

“sport shoes”应为复数“sports shoes”，“different size”应为复数“different sizes”，因为指的是多种鞋子尺码的不同。

× I usually spend around 3000 to 5000 NT dollars on shoes because I believe that shoes often have fashion trends.

✓ I usually spend around 3000 to 5000 NT dollars on shoes because I believe that shoes often follow fashion trends.

“shoes often have fashion trends”表达不准确，应改为“shoes often follow fashion trends”，表示鞋子跟随时尚潮流。

× For example, when a certain style becomes popular, many people want to buy it, so its price will tend to increase.

✓ For example, when a certain style becomes popular, many people want to buy it, so its price tends to increase.

“will tend to increase”时态不太合适，改为一般现在时“tends to increase”更符合习惯表达。

× I definitely prefer fashionable and comfortable shoes on my life because it cannot only support my feet to feel relaxed but also can suit my outfit.

✓ I definitely prefer fashionable and comfortable shoes in my life because they can not only support my feet to feel relaxed but also suit my outfit.

“on my life”应为“in my life”。“it”指代复数“shoes”应改为“they”。“cannot only”应为“can not only”。“but also can suit”中“can”位置应调整。

× For example, I like to buy the brand Echoes only Zuka and its shoes cannot only support my.

✓ For example, I like to buy the brand Echoes, only Zuka, and its shoes can not only support my feet.

句子不完整，缺少宾语“feet”。“cannot only”应为“can not only”。

× For example, I like to buy the brand Echoes only Zuka and its shoes cannot only support my.

✓ For example, I like to buy the brand Echoes, only Zuka, and its shoes can not only support my feet but also match my style.

句子不完整，缺少宾语和并列结构，需补充完整表达。