Shoes— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to answer directly and clearly, for example, say how often you buy shoes and why. Use simple sentences and avoid redundancy.

例: Yes, I like buying shoes. I usually buy one pair every month because I want to find comfortable shoes that fit well.

提案: Your answer is confusing and has grammar mistakes. Try to explain your experience clearly and use linking words to connect ideas. For example, explain the problem and your preference clearly.

例: Yes, I have bought shoes online, but it was not a good experience. I ordered the wrong size and could not return them, so now I prefer to buy shoes in stores.

提案: Your answer is unclear and does not directly answer the question. Try to give a specific amount or range and explain briefly. Use simple and clear sentences.

例: I usually spend about 50 to 100 dollars on shoes each month. I try to buy only what I need to manage my budget.

提案: Your answer is very unclear and does not address the question. Try to state your preference clearly and give reasons. Use simple sentences and relevant vocabulary.

例: I prefer comfortable shoes because I wear them for a long time. Fashionable shoes are nice, but comfort is more important for me.

× So I'm just finishes, remember I tried to find my own shop to sell shoes and usually only buy one shoes per month because I just tried to find even comfortable shoes every time.

✓ So I just finish, remember I tried to find my own shop to sell shoes and usually only buy one pair of shoes per month because I just try to find comfortable shoes every time.

The phrase 'I'm just finishes' is incorrect because 'finishes' is a third person singular verb form, but the subject 'I' requires the base form or present participle 'finish' or 'finishing'. Also, 'one shoes' is incorrect because 'shoes' is plural; it should be 'one pair of shoes'. The verb tense should be consistent; 'tried' and 'try' should be aligned to present or past appropriately. Suggest using present tense 'I just finish' and 'I just try' to match the context.

× usually only buy one shoes per month

✓ usually only buy one pair of shoes per month

The word 'shoes' is plural, so it cannot be preceded by 'one' directly. The correct expression is 'one pair of shoes' to indicate a single unit.

× I had experience of five issues in mind but it was not a good experience at all.

✓ I had five issues in mind but it was not a good experience at all.

The phrase 'had experience of five issues in mind' is awkward and incorrect. 'Had five issues in mind' is clearer and grammatically correct. Also, 'had' is correctly used as past tense here.

× I bought it one size of shoes and they couldn't return the bag after that.

✓ I bought one size of shoes and they couldn't return the bag after that.

The phrase 'bought it one size of shoes' is incorrect. 'It' is unnecessary and should be removed. Also, 'one size of shoes' is acceptable but could be better as 'shoes in one size'. The sentence is corrected by removing 'it'.

× I preferred to box and go as well instead of buying online.

✓ I preferred to go to the store and buy shoes in person instead of buying online.

The phrase 'preferred to box and go' is unclear and likely a misuse of idiomatic expression. The intended meaning seems to be preferring to buy shoes in a physical store rather than online. The correction clarifies this meaning.

× That's an interesting question. I would say basically I've managed my monthly expenses and find out that I spend a lot of money or choose and go to that. I try to avoid all the way with making the shoppings.

✓ That's an interesting question. I would say I basically manage my monthly expenses and find that I spend a lot of money on shoes. I try to avoid shopping too much.

The original sentence is confusing and contains several errors. 'I've managed' should be 'I manage' to match the present tense. 'Choose and go to that' is unclear and likely incorrect. 'Making the shoppings' is incorrect; 'shopping' is uncountable and does not take 'the'. The correction simplifies and clarifies the intended meaning.

× So university students are preferred to the European Union, but now they became automatic instead of their ability to comfortable shoes because I had to be proactive with my kids.

✓ So university students preferred European shoes, but now they choose comfortable shoes because I have to be proactive with my kids.

The original sentence is unclear and contains multiple errors. 'Are preferred to the European Union' is incorrect; likely intended 'prefer European shoes'. 'They became automatic instead of their ability to comfortable shoes' is ungrammatical and unclear. The correction interprets the intended meaning and corrects pronoun and verb usage accordingly.