Shoes— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn cần rõ ràng và mạch lạc hơn. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi trước, sau đó mới bổ sung chi tiết. Hãy tránh dùng từ không chính xác như "fashion addicted" và chú ý ngữ pháp. Ngoài ra, câu trả lời nên ngắn gọn, không quá dài dòng.

例: Yes, I like buying shoes, but I only buy them occasionally, usually on special occasions.

提案: Bạn nên trả lời rõ ràng và tránh lặp từ không cần thiết như "umm" hay "you know". Câu trả lời cần có cấu trúc rõ ràng với câu chủ đề và các chi tiết hỗ trợ được liên kết mạch lạc. Hãy sử dụng từ vựng phù hợp và chính xác hơn.

例: Yes, I often buy shoes online because the website offers affordable prices and fast shipping.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn thiếu rõ ràng và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi với số tiền cụ thể hoặc khoảng giá, tránh dùng những con số không thực tế như "$1 billion". Hãy sử dụng câu đơn giản, dễ hiểu và tránh lặp từ.

例: I usually spend around 50 to 100 dollars on shoes because I am a student and have a limited budget.

提案: Bạn nên trả lời rõ ràng và mạch lạc hơn, tránh dùng từ không chính xác và câu không hoàn chỉnh. Hãy trình bày ý kiến của bạn một cách logic, sử dụng từ nối để liên kết các ý và dùng từ vựng phù hợp với chủ đề.

例: I prefer comfortable shoes because I want them to be durable and last a long time, even if they are not very fashionable.

× As a fashion addicted, I really like buying clothes, especially shoes and some, but I cannot say that I usually buy it, just sometimes on special occasions.

✓ As a fashion addict, I really like buying clothes, especially shoes and some others, but I cannot say that I usually buy them, just sometimes on special occasions.

The phrase 'fashion addicted' is incorrect; the correct noun form is 'fashion addict'. Also, 'some' should be 'some others' to refer to additional items, and 'it' should be 'them' to agree with the plural noun 'shoes and some others'. This improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× I usually buy shoes on shopping.

✓ I usually buy shoes when shopping.

The preposition 'on' is incorrectly used with 'shopping'. The correct preposition is 'when' to indicate the time or occasion of buying shoes during shopping.

× I cannot say that I usually buy it, just sometimes on special occasions.

✓ I cannot say that I usually buy them, just sometimes on special occasions.

The pronoun 'it' is singular but refers to 'shoes', which is plural. The correct pronoun is 'them' to match the plural noun.

× Not much I think at a university students and I cannot really make my own money.

✓ Not much, I think, as a university student and I cannot really make my own money.

The phrase 'at a university students' is incorrect because 'students' is plural while 'a' indicates singular. It should be 'as a university student' to correctly express the speaker's status.

× The average money or I think that you know, the the most expensive 1 was like under $1 billion.

✓ The average amount of money I spend, I think, is low, and the most expensive one was like under $100.

The phrase 'average money' is vague; 'average amount of money' is clearer. Also, '$1 billion' is unrealistic for shoes, likely a mistake. '$100' is a more reasonable figure. The sentence is restructured for clarity.

× I would prefer the comfortable one, like uh, I always want to try something durable and comfortable, one that can last a long time, which means that it will umm on.

✓ I would prefer the comfortable ones, like, I always want to try something durable and comfortable, ones that can last a long time, which means that they will, umm, last long.

The singular 'one' is inconsistent with the plural context of shoes. Using 'ones' matches the plural noun. Also, the phrase 'it will umm on' is unclear and corrected to 'they will last long' for clarity.