Shoes— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer more coherent and avoid repetition. Use clear sentences and correct grammar to express your ideas naturally. For example, explain why you prefer your old shoes and when you decide to buy new ones, using linking words to connect your ideas.

例: Yes, I like buying shoes, but not very often. Usually, I buy new shoes once or twice a year when my old ones are completely worn out. I prefer to use my current shoes until they are no longer comfortable or functional.

提案: Improve your answer by using more natural expressions and correct word forms. Also, try to organize your reasons clearly with linking words to make your answer more fluent and logical.

例: Honestly, I have never bought shoes online, but I would like to try it in the future. However, I prefer to try shoes on my feet to feel their comfort, style, and material before buying them.

提案: Your answer is good but can be improved by adding a clear topic sentence and using linking words to connect your ideas. Also, try to avoid vague phrases like 'because it works' and explain your reasons more specifically.

例: The amount of money I spend on shoes depends on several factors such as quality, brand, material, style, and comfort. If a shoe meets all these criteria, I am willing to pay more because it will last longer and be more comfortable.

提案: Try to complete your answer and avoid repetition. Use correct grammar and linking words to explain your preferences clearly and naturally. Also, finish your thought about occasions to make your answer complete.

例: I prefer comfortable shoes for daily use and walking because they are better for my feet and provide more comfort. However, for special occasions, I might choose fashionable shoes to match the event.

× Mostly once or twice in the year because I I really prefer my LA.

✓ Mostly once or twice in the year because I really prefer my LA.

The sentence contains a repeated word 'I I' which is a typographical error and should be corrected to a single 'I'. This is not a grammar problem type from the list but a typographical error, so no correction is needed under the given instructions.

× My old shoes be worn out completely.

✓ My old shoes are worn out completely.

The verb 'be' is incorrectly used here. The correct form is 'are' to agree with the plural subject 'shoes' and to form the present passive voice. This is a 'There be issue' (ID 3) and 'Subject-verb agreement errors' (ID 27) but mainly 'There be issue' as per the list.

× Then I will buy any shoes.

✓ Then I will buy some shoes.

The use of 'any' in affirmative sentences is generally incorrect; 'some' is preferred. Also, 'will' is correctly used for future intention. The main issue is the quantifier 'any' which is incorrect here, so this is 'Incorrect use of quantifiers' (ID 14).

× Honestly I've never bought a shoes online but I really like to try it in future because I really prefer to put them on my feet to be to feel the comfortability and feel the style and feel the sense of the shoes and also I'd like to touch it to recognize the material.

✓ Honestly I've never bought shoes online but I really would like to try it in the future because I really prefer to put them on my feet to feel the comfort, style, and sense of the shoes, and also I'd like to touch them to recognize the material.

The phrase 'a shoes' is incorrect because 'shoes' is plural and should not be preceded by 'a'. Also, 'comfortability' is not a standard word; 'comfort' is preferred. 'Like to try it in future' should be 'would like to try it in the future' for politeness and correctness. 'Touch it' should be 'touch them' to agree with plural 'shoes'. These are 'Singular and plural issue' (ID 1), 'Modal verb usage' (ID 4), and 'Incorrect use of pronouns' (ID 12).

× Actually, it really depends on several factors like quality, the brand, the texture and material, the style, and the comfort.

✓ Actually, it really depends on several factors like quality, brand, texture and material, style, and comfort.

The use of 'the' before some nouns is unnecessary here. This is an 'Incorrect use of the definite article' (ID 17).

× If a shoe has all of these factors, I definitely pay for it because it works.

✓ If a shoe has all of these factors, I will definitely pay for it because it works.

The sentence is mostly correct but 'I definitely pay for it' should be 'I will definitely pay for it' to indicate future intention. This is 'Future tense issue' (ID 7).

× Certainly it depends on the occasion and the place that I want wear a shoes for.

✓ Certainly it depends on the occasion and the place that I want to wear shoes for.

The phrase 'a shoes' is incorrect because 'shoes' is plural and should not be preceded by 'a'. Also, 'want wear' should be 'want to wear'. These are 'Singular and plural issue' (ID 1) and 'Sentence structure errors' (ID 26).

× For instance, for daily use and for walking, I really prefer to wear a comfortable shoes because it's better for my feet and it makes it feels for more comfort for comfort.

✓ For instance, for daily use and walking, I really prefer to wear comfortable shoes because they're better for my feet and make them feel more comfortable.

The phrase 'a comfortable shoes' is incorrect because 'shoes' is plural and should not be preceded by 'a'. 'It makes it feels for more comfort for comfort' is ungrammatical and should be corrected to 'make them feel more comfortable'. These are 'Singular and plural issue' (ID 1), 'Incorrect use of pronouns' (ID 12), and 'Sentence structure errors' (ID 26).

× But for occasions I.

✓ But for occasions, I prefer fashionable shoes.

The sentence is incomplete and lacks a verb and object. It should be completed to make sense. This is a 'Sentence without a verb' (ID 23) and 'Sentence structure errors' (ID 26).