Shoes— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is generally good but can be improved by avoiding sentence fragments like 'Work casual wear.' Instead, combine it with the previous sentence for clarity. Also, try to use linking words such as 'because' or 'so' to make your answer more coherent and natural.

例: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes quite a lot because they allow me to express my personal style. I usually buy new shoes every few months, especially when there is a sale or when I need something specific for work, such as work casual wear. For instance, I recently purchased a pair of comfortable sneakers that I wear almost daily.

提案: Your answer is clear and relevant. To improve, try to use more varied vocabulary and add linking words like 'therefore' or 'which means' to enhance coherence. Also, avoid using 'only several times' which sounds slightly unnatural; instead, say 'a few times'.

例: Yes, I have bought shoes a few times online. It is very convenient because I can easily compare different styles and prices without leaving my home. For example, I once purchased running shoes from a popular website, and they arrived quickly and fit perfectly.

提案: Your answer is well-structured and informative. To improve further, you could use linking words like 'because' or 'so' to connect your ideas more smoothly. Also, try to avoid repeating similar words like 'good quality' and 'long lasting' by using synonyms.

例: I usually spend a moderate amount of money on shoes, typically around $50 to $100 per pair, because I prefer investing in comfortable and durable footwear. For instance, I often choose brands known for their sturdy materials to ensure I get value for my money.

提案: Your answer has grammatical errors and unclear phrases such as 'Like to buy comfortable shoes are over fashionable ones' and 'comfortable shoes country'. To improve, form complete sentences, use correct grammar, and clarify your ideas. Also, use linking words like 'because' and 'for example' properly to make your answer coherent.

例: I prefer comfortable shoes over fashionable ones because comfort is essential for daily wear, especially when I have to work or stand for long periods. For example, even if a pair of shoes looks stylish, I won't choose them if they cause pain or discomfort. Ultimately, I believe that comfort should be the priority when choosing shoes.

× Work casual wear.

✓ I need something specific for work, such as casual wear.

The original sentence 'Work casual wear.' is a sentence fragment lacking a verb and proper structure. It should be connected to the previous sentence to form a complete thought. Using 'such as' clarifies the example and improves sentence flow.

× Like to buy comfortable shoes are over fashionable ones because comfort is essential for daily wear, especially when I have to work or stand for long periods.

✓ I like to buy comfortable shoes over fashionable ones because comfort is essential for daily wear, especially when I have to work or stand for long periods.

The original sentence is missing the subject 'I' and has an incorrect verb form 'are' which disrupts the sentence structure. Adding 'I' and removing 'are' corrects the sentence to proper subject-verb agreement and clarity.

× Ultimately, I believe that comfortable shoes country.

✓ Ultimately, I believe that comfortable shoes matter.

The word 'country' is incorrectly used here, making the sentence incomplete and unclear. Replacing 'country' with 'matter' completes the sentence logically and grammatically.