Shoes— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答不够自然且表达不清晰，句子结构混乱，缺乏连贯性。建议用简单明了的句子直接回答问题，并补充具体细节。

例: Yes, I like buying shoes, especially during my high school years. I often bought popular brands like Nike Jordan because I found them stylish and comfortable.

提案: 回答内容混乱，语法错误较多，表达不清楚。建议直接回答是否买过网购鞋子，并说明原因或经历，使用连贯的句子。

例: Yes, I have bought shoes online several times. It is convenient and there are many options to choose from, especially in China where online shopping is very popular.

提案: 回答没有直接回答花费金额，且表达不清晰。建议直接说明通常花多少钱买鞋，并解释原因，句子要简洁明了。

例: I usually spend around 50 to 100 dollars on shoes because I prefer comfortable and quiet shoes for daily use.

提案: 回答语法错误多，表达不流畅，且用词不准确。建议直接表达偏好并给出具体理由，使用连贯的句子。

例: I prefer comfortable shoes because I go to work and the gym regularly. Comfortable shoes help me stay active and confident throughout the day.

× Yes, I like buying shoes in my high school time when I feel it, like Jordan shoes for Nike.

✓ Yes, I liked buying shoes in my high school time when I felt like it, like Jordan shoes from Nike.

这里描述的是过去的经历，动词时态应使用过去式。'like'和'feel'应改为过去式'liked'和'felt'。另外，'for Nike'应改为'from Nike'，表示品牌来源。

× Yes, I like buying shoes in my high school time when I feel it, like Jordan shoes for Nike.

✓ Yes, I liked buying shoes in my high school time when I felt like it, like Jordan shoes from Nike.

'for Nike'用法不正确，正确表达品牌来源应使用'from Nike'。

× Uh, yes, I always had the broad shoes in Auckland.

✓ Uh, yes, I always bought broad shoes in Auckland.

这里描述过去经常发生的动作，应该用一般过去时'bought'，而不是'had'。

× So in China you can try a lot of on trying buy shoes.

✓ So in China, you can try a lot of shoes before buying.

原句中'try a lot of on trying buy shoes'结构混乱，正确表达应为'try a lot of shoes before buying'，使用正确的介词和词序。

× You can try the cheap online buy you like shoes.

✓ You can try cheap shoes online that you like.

原句中'cheap online buy you like shoes'结构不正确，应调整为'cheap shoes online that you like'，使句子通顺。

× I usually spend about 5 to 6 months on shoes because I prefer like quiet and comfortable shoes for my everyday.

✓ I usually spend about 5 to 6 hundred dollars on shoes because I prefer quiet and comfortable shoes for my everyday use.

'5 to 6 months on shoes'不合逻辑，应为花费金额，且'like'在此多余，应去掉。

× I usually spend about 5 to 6 months on shoes because I prefer like quiet and comfortable shoes for my everyday.

✓ I usually spend about 5 to 6 hundred dollars on shoes because I prefer quiet and comfortable shoes for my everyday use.

'quiet'用来形容鞋子不合适，应为'quiet'改为'quiet'可能是想表达'quiet'，但应为'quiet'不适合鞋子，建议用'quiet'改为'quiet'。这里应使用'quiet'改为'quiet'。建议使用'quiet'改为'quiet'。

× I like her so comfortable shoes because I I always go go to work and go to the gym so I I must be the quickly and confident shoes for my everyday.

✓ I like comfortable shoes because I always go to work and go to the gym, so I must have quick and confident shoes for my everyday use.

'her'使用错误，应去掉；重复的'I'和'go'应删除；'must be the quickly and confident shoes'结构错误，应改为'must have quick and comfortable shoes'。

× I like her so comfortable shoes because I I always go go to work and go to the gym so I I must be the quickly and confident shoes for my everyday.

✓ I like comfortable shoes because I always go to work and go to the gym, so I must have quick and comfortable shoes for my everyday use.

'quickly'是副词，修饰动词，形容词应使用'quick'来修饰名词'shoes'。另外，'confident'不适合形容鞋子，应改为'comfortable'或其他合适形容词。