Shoes— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains many hesitations and repetitions. Try to give a clear and concise response directly addressing the question, using simple and correct sentences. Avoid filler words and focus on fluency and coherence.

例: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes quite often because I think they are an important part of my wardrobe. I usually go to the mall to find good quality shoes that match my clothes.

提案: Your answer is confusing and off-topic. Make sure to answer the question directly and clearly. Use correct vocabulary and sentence structure. Avoid mixing unrelated ideas and focus on explaining your experience with buying shoes online.

例: No, I have never bought shoes online because I prefer to see and try them in person at the mall before buying.

提案: Your answer is unclear and lacks specific information. Try to give a precise amount or range and explain why you spend that much. Use linking words to make your answer coherent and avoid hesitation sounds.

例: I usually spend around 1,400 to 1,500 Georgian Lari on shoes because I believe that higher price means better quality and durability.

提案: Your answer is repetitive and unclear. Try to clearly state your preference and support it with reasons. Use linking words to connect your ideas and avoid filler words to improve fluency.

例: I prefer fashionable shoes because they not only look good but are also comfortable to wear. I think it's important to have shoes that combine style and comfort.

× I like and enjoy buying a bangle a lot of shoes because actually, uh, it is an important thing.

✓ I like and enjoy buying a lot of shoes because actually, uh, it is an important thing.

The phrase 'a bangle a lot of shoes' is incorrect because 'a bangle' is an unrelated quantifier here and causes confusion. The correct quantifier is 'a lot of' to indicate many shoes.

× I often going, I often go to uh mall.

✓ I often go to the mall.

The phrase 'I often going' is incorrect; it should be 'I often go' to match the present tense. Also, 'to uh mall' lacks the definite article 'the' before 'mall'.

× I have never bought eyeshadow online because I am not a person who buy clothes in online website because I am a person who like and hang out with alone or with playing the in mall because when I see.

✓ I have never bought shoes online because I am not a person who buys clothes on online websites; I prefer to hang out alone or play in the mall when I go.

The original sentence has multiple issues: 'buy' should be 'buys' to agree with 'person' (third person singular), 'in online website' should be 'on online websites' (correct preposition and plural), and the sentence structure is confusing and incomplete. Also, 'eyeshadow' is likely a misheard word for 'shoes'.

× I usually spend on shows, so for example, low 14 on a 1500, uh, uh, Gale, uh, because, uh, when, uh, it's too much money, it is a good quality and uh, uh, it's uh, he's a more guaranteed than other shows which.

✓ I usually spend on shoes, for example, around 1400 to 1500, because when it's expensive, it is of good quality and more guaranteed than other shoes.

The original sentence has incorrect words like 'shows' instead of 'shoes', 'low 14 on a 1500' is unclear and corrected to 'around 1400 to 1500'. Also, 'he's a more guaranteed' is incorrect; it should be 'more guaranteed'. The preposition 'on' is acceptable here with 'spend' but the sentence needed restructuring for clarity.

× Oh, always I uh, I will prefer uh, to wear fashionable shoes and all comfortable shoes because of fashionable search, Uh, shoes, uh, have a moral quality and uh, uh, more comforter, uh, when uh, you wear it, uh, But uh, once one thing is better, fashionable shoes are better.

✓ Oh, I always prefer to wear fashionable shoes rather than comfortable shoes because fashionable shoes have better quality and are more comfortable when you wear them. But overall, fashionable shoes are better.

The original sentence misuses conjunctions and articles, and the phrase 'all comfortable shoes' is incorrect. 'Moral quality' should be 'better quality', and 'more comforter' should be 'more comfortable'. The sentence structure is confusing and needs to be simplified for clarity.