Shoes— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cevabınızda daha doğal ve akıcı ifadeler kullanmalısınız. "Commerce" kelimesi yanlış kullanılmış ve cümleniz anlam açısından net değil. Ayrıca, cevaplarınızı 3-4 cümle ile sınırlı tutup, doğrudan soruya yanıt verip ardından destekleyici detaylar eklemelisiniz.

例: Yes, I really enjoy buying shoes, especially sneakers. I like to have a variety of styles for different occasions. For example, I own a limited edition pair that I really treasure. I usually buy shoes a few times a year when I find something I like.

提案: Cümlenizde bazı tekrarlar ve dilbilgisi hataları var. Daha akıcı ve mantıklı bağlaçlar kullanarak cümlenizi geliştirebilirsiniz. Ayrıca, cümlenizi daha kısa ve net tutmalısınız.

例: Yes, I have bought shoes online several times because it is more convenient. Since I am often busy, shopping online saves me a lot of time compared to visiting multiple stores in person.

提案: Cevabınızda tekrarlar ve belirsizlikler var. Daha net ve doğrudan cevap vermelisiniz. Ayrıca, cümlenizi daha akıcı hale getirmek için bağlaçlar kullanabilirsiniz.

例: The amount I spend on shoes depends on the pair I want. However, shoes are quite expensive in Turkey nowadays, so I usually spend around 2000 to 3000 Turkish liras on a good pair.

提案: Cevabınız anlaşılır değil ve soruya yanıt vermiyor. Soruyu doğrudan yanıtlamalı ve tercihinizi açıklamalısınız. Ayrıca, neden böyle düşündüğünüzü belirtmek faydalı olur.

例: I prefer comfortable shoes because I spend a lot of time walking during the day. However, I also like fashionable shoes for special occasions.

× I love a different variety of sneakers.

✓ I love different varieties of sneakers.

The phrase 'a different variety' is incorrect because 'variety' is a singular noun and 'different' implies multiple types. Therefore, the plural form 'varieties' should be used without the article 'a' to correctly express multiple types of sneakers.

× I have a pair of commerce, like uh, for example, I have a pair of commerce that I love the most and it's a limited edition, but I tend to buy my shoes.

✓ I have a pair of Converse, for example, that I love the most and it's a limited edition, but I tend to buy my shoes.

The word 'commerce' is likely a mispronunciation or misspelling of 'Converse,' a brand of shoes. Also, the sentence structure is confusing. Correcting the brand name and clarifying the sentence improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× so I it through many stores.

✓ so I look through many stores.

The original sentence is incomplete and lacks a verb after 'I.' Adding the verb 'look' completes the sentence and clarifies the intended meaning.

× I think it depends on, I think it depends on the pair of sneakers that I want to buy, but it can cost around.

✓ I think it depends on the pair of sneakers that I want to buy, but it can cost around that amount.

The sentence is incomplete and repetitive. Removing the repeated phrase and completing the sentence with 'that amount' makes it grammatically correct and clearer.

× Nowadays it's kind of expensive in Turkey. So we can host around, uh, 2000 or 3000 Turkish liras, I guess.

✓ Nowadays it's kind of expensive in Turkey. So we can spend around 2000 or 3000 Turkish liras, I guess.

The verb 'host' is incorrectly used here. The correct verb to indicate expenditure is 'spend.' Replacing 'host' with 'spend' corrects the prepositional usage.