Shoes— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Ответ должен быть более естественным и грамматически правильным. Избегайте повторений и уточните количество пар обуви, используя правильные выражения. Также улучшите связность, используя подходящие связующие слова.

例: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes, but I don't do it often because I think having a few pairs is enough for daily use. For instance, I have one pair for everyday wear, another for exercising, one for university, and a fourth for hiking or outdoor activities.

提案: Используйте правильные грамматические формы и избегайте повторов. Свяжите предложения более плавно с помощью подходящих союзов. Также уточните детали, чтобы ответ был более конкретным.

例: No, I haven't bought shoes online because I prefer to try them on first. For example, I find it hard to be sure about the size and fit when shopping online, so I usually buy shoes in stores where I can check their comfort and suitability.

提案: Ответ содержит грамматические ошибки и нечеткие выражения. Следует использовать правильные структуры и более точные формулировки. Также избегайте повторов и уточните валюту, если возможно.

例: I usually spend about 50,000 to 60,000 tenge on each pair of shoes because I believe that slightly expensive shoes last longer and have better quality than cheaper ones.

提案: Старайтесь избегать слов-паразитов и использовать более связные предложения. Добавьте связующие слова для плавного перехода между идеями и уточните ситуации для большей конкретики.

例: It depends on the situation. For example, if I need shoes for my daily workouts at the gym, I prefer comfortable ones. However, I like to wear fashionable shoes when I want to match my outfit for social events.

× I would have one shoes, one pair of shoes for my daily exercise, one pair for university, and another third pair for my from hiking or outdoor activities.

✓ I would have one pair of shoes for my daily exercise, one pair for university, and a third pair for hiking or outdoor activities.

The word 'shoes' is plural and cannot be used with 'one' directly. The correct phrase is 'one pair of shoes' because 'pair' is the singular noun representing two shoes. Also, 'another third pair' is redundant; 'a third pair' is sufficient. The phrase 'for my from hiking' is incorrect; it should be 'for hiking'. Ошибка связана с неправильным использованием единственного и множественного числа. Следует использовать 'one pair of shoes' вместо 'one shoes', так как 'shoes' всегда во множественном числе.

× No, I haven't because I prefer to try them on before I purchasing it.

✓ No, I haven't because I prefer to try them on before I purchase them.

After 'before', the base form of the verb should be used, not the '-ing' form. Also, 'it' should be 'them' to refer to 'shoes' (plural). So, 'before I purchasing it' should be 'before I purchase them'. Ошибка связана с неправильным использованием глагола с окончанием -ing после 'before'. Следует использовать инфинитив без частицы 'to' после 'before' в данном контексте.

× No, I haven't because I prefer to try them on before I purchasing it.

✓ No, I haven't because I prefer to try them on before I purchase them.

The pronoun 'it' is singular and does not agree with 'shoes', which is plural. The correct pronoun is 'them' to match the plural noun. Ошибка связана с неправильным использованием местоимений. Следует использовать 'them' для множественного числа вместо 'it'.

× I prefer to buy it from a store where I can check if they are comfortable or suitable.

✓ I prefer to buy them from a store where I can check if they are comfortable or suitable.

The pronoun 'it' is singular and does not agree with 'shoes', which is plural. The correct pronoun is 'them' to match the plural noun. Ошибка связана с неправильным использованием местоимений. Следует использовать 'them' для множественного числа вместо 'it'.

× I usually spend about 50,000 to 60,000 tinggi on each pair of shoes because I prefer I believe that a bit expensive shoes.

✓ I usually spend about 50,000 to 60,000 tinggi on each pair of shoes because I believe that slightly expensive shoes are better.

The phrase 'a bit expensive shoes' is incorrect because 'a bit' modifies adjectives but needs to be followed by a singular noun or used differently. Also, 'prefer I believe' is redundant and incorrect. The sentence is corrected to express the intended meaning clearly. Ошибка связана с неправильным использованием количественных слов и структурой предложения. Следует использовать 'slightly expensive shoes' и убрать избыточное 'prefer I believe'.

× They can last longer and they have better quality than the cheaper ones.

✓ They can last longer and have better quality than cheaper ones.

The definite article 'the' before 'cheaper ones' is unnecessary here because it refers to a general comparison. Also, 'they' is repeated unnecessarily. Ошибка связана с неправильным использованием артикля и избыточным повторением местоимения.

× It depends on situations like uh, if I need to buy shoes for my daily workouts for my gym, then I would prefer comfortable ones.

✓ It depends on situations, like if I need to buy shoes for my daily workouts at my gym, then I would prefer comfortable ones.

The phrase 'for my gym' is better expressed as 'at my gym' to indicate location. Also, adding a comma improves sentence clarity. Ошибка связана с неправильным использованием предлогов и пунктуации.