Shoes— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to make your response more natural and concise by directly answering the question, using correct grammar, and avoiding redundancy. For example, mention your preference clearly and state how often you buy shoes in a simple sentence.

例: Yes, I like buying shoes, especially branded ones like Nike and Adidas. However, since they are expensive, I usually buy one pair each month.

提案: Your answer has good content but contains grammatical mistakes and awkward phrasing. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and correct vocabulary (e.g., 'foot length' instead of 'food length'). Also, avoid redundancy and be more concise.

例: Yes, I have bought shoes online many times because online shops offer a wide variety of options. Since I provide my foot length, they usually send me the correct size.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains many grammatical errors. Try to directly answer the question with specific details about your spending habits, using clear and correct sentences. Avoid irrelevant or confusing information.

例: I usually spend around 5 million VND every two months on original shoes because I want my feet to feel comfortable and relaxed.

提案: Your answer shows your preference but is confusing and contains awkward expressions. Use clear and natural language to explain your choice and provide reasons with linking words for coherence.

例: I definitely prefer comfortable shoes over fashionable ones because they help my feet feel relaxed and calm, which is more important to me than style.

× Yes, I prefer some brand shoes such as Nike brands and Adidas shoes but they are in high class shoes and luxury so I should have enough money to buy them.

✓ Yes, I prefer some brand shoes such as Nike and Adidas shoes but they are high-class and luxurious so I should have enough money to buy them.

The phrase 'some brand shoes' is awkward; 'some branded shoes' or simply 'brand shoes' is better. 'Nike brands' is incorrect; 'Nike' alone suffices as a brand name. 'High class shoes and luxury' is incorrect; 'high-class and luxurious' are the correct adjective forms to describe the shoes. Also, 'luxury' as a noun does not fit here without an article or rephrasing.

× With this fact I buy one shoes a month.

✓ With this fact, I buy one pair of shoes a month.

The word 'shoes' is plural, so 'one shoes' is incorrect. The correct phrase is 'one pair of shoes' when referring to a single set of shoes.

× Yes, many times there are many benefits to buy shoes from online shops such as offers a huge different diversity.

✓ Yes, many times there are many benefits to buying shoes from online shops such as a huge variety of options.

The phrase 'benefits to buy' should be 'benefits to buying' because 'benefits to' is followed by a gerund. 'Offers a huge different diversity' is awkward and incorrect; 'a huge variety of options' is clearer and grammatically correct.

× My food length is 24.5 and with this detail they never send me a wrong size of shoes.

✓ My foot length is 24.5, and with this detail, they never send me the wrong size of shoes.

'Food length' is a typo; it should be 'foot length.' Also, 'a wrong size of shoes' is incorrect; 'the wrong size of shoes' is appropriate because it refers to a specific wrong size.

× According to this fact, I enjoy to both original shoes.

✓ According to this fact, I enjoy both original shoes.

The verb 'enjoy' is not followed by 'to'; it should be directly followed by the object. So 'enjoy to both original shoes' is incorrect; it should be 'enjoy both original shoes.'

× I spend so much money to buy SH pair of shoes for each month such as over 5 million two months in month but my foot is in calm and relaxed.

✓ I spend so much money to buy a pair of shoes each month, such as over 5 million every two months, but my feet are calm and relaxed.

'SH pair' is unclear; assuming 'a pair' is intended. 'For each month' should be 'each month.' 'Over 5 million two months in month' is confusing; corrected to 'over 5 million every two months.' 'My foot is in calm and relaxed' is incorrect; 'my feet are calm and relaxed' is correct because 'feet' is plural and adjectives 'calm' and 'relaxed' describe the state.

× Buy fashionable shoes.

✓ Buying fashionable shoes.

The phrase 'Buy fashionable shoes.' is a fragment and does not fit the sentence structure. Changing it to 'Buying fashionable shoes' makes it a noun phrase that fits the context better.

× Angels will go.

✓ Angels will go away.

The sentence 'Angels will go.' is incomplete or unclear. Adding 'away' clarifies the meaning, indicating that 'angels will leave' or 'go away.'

× But my feet strange never come back with this fact.

✓ But my feet strangely never come back with this fact.

'Feet strange' is incorrect; 'feet' is a noun and 'strangely' is the adverb modifying the verb 'come back.' The adverb form 'strangely' is needed here.

× I'd rather to wear comfortable shoes and stay in, relax, smooth, help my feet to be calm.

✓ I'd rather wear comfortable shoes and stay in, relax, feel smooth, and help my feet to be calm.

'I'd rather' is followed directly by the base verb without 'to,' so 'I'd rather to wear' is incorrect. Also, 'smooth' is an adjective; here, 'feel smooth' is more appropriate. Adding 'and' before 'help' improves sentence flow.