Shoes— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to give a clear, direct response with a topic sentence, followed by supporting details using linking words. Avoid incomplete sentences and redundancy.

例: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes, especially at the start of winter. I usually buy shoes that are comfortable and suitable for the season because comfort is important to me.

提案: Your answer has some grammar and vocabulary issues. Use linking words to connect ideas and be more specific. Also, avoid vague phrases like 'cheap able' and clarify your preferences.

例: Yes, I recently bought a pair of shoes from an Instagram store. The quality was very good, and the prices were affordable. Because of this, I prefer buying shoes online for convenience and variety.

提案: Your answer is unclear and incomplete. Provide a direct response with specific details and correct grammar. Avoid incomplete sentences and explain your spending habits clearly.

例: I usually spend around $200 to $300 on shoes because I believe quality is more important than price. I typically buy shoes once or twice a year, depending on my needs.

提案: Your answer is generally clear but could be improved by using more precise vocabulary and linking words. Also, avoid repeating phrases and ensure sentences are complete.

例: I prefer comfortable shoes because they help me feel relaxed and confident throughout the day. Although fashionable shoes look nice, comfort is more important to me in every situation.

× Well, I love to wear and buy shoes and usually on the start of the winter I buy shoes for my session.

✓ Well, I love wearing and buying shoes and usually at the start of winter I buy shoes for my season.

The verbs 'love to wear and buy' should be in the '-ing' form after 'love' to express enjoyment of activities. Also, the preposition 'on' is incorrect before 'the start of winter'; 'at' is the correct preposition. 'Session' is likely a mistranslation or misuse; 'season' fits better in this context.

× With comfort.

✓ I look for comfort.

'With comfort' is a sentence fragment lacking a subject and verb. It should be rephrased to a complete sentence to convey the intended meaning.

× Stop buying shoes is a very enjoy.

✓ Stopping buying shoes is very enjoyable.

The original sentence is ungrammatical and unclear. 'Stop buying shoes' needs to be a gerund phrase as the subject, and 'enjoy' should be the adjective 'enjoyable' to describe the action.

× Well recently I just bought a pair of shoes from an Instagram page, so the quality of shoes was very good and the price are also cheap able and I also preferred all to buy shoes online.

✓ Well, recently I just bought a pair of shoes from an Instagram page, so the quality of the shoes was very good and the prices were also cheap, and I also prefer to buy shoes online.

The verb 'are' should be past tense 'were' to agree with 'recently' and past action. 'Cheap able' is incorrect; 'cheap' is the correct adjective. 'Preferred all to buy' is incorrect; 'prefer to buy' is the correct present tense expression to indicate a general preference.

× so the quality of shoes was very good and the price are also cheap able

✓ so the quality of the shoes was very good and the prices were also cheap

The noun 'price' should be plural 'prices' to agree with 'shoes' and the verb 'are' should be 'were' to match past tense. 'Cheap able' is not a word; 'cheap' is the correct adjective.

× I also preferred all to buy shoes online.

✓ I also prefer to buy shoes online.

The verb 'preferred' is past tense, but the sentence expresses a general preference, so present tense 'prefer' is appropriate.

× On shoes, well, usually I spend. 2 or $3000 to buy shoes because price are not matter.

✓ On shoes, well, usually I spend 2 or 3000 dollars to buy shoes because price does not matter.

'Price' is singular and should be followed by 'does not' instead of 'are not'. Also, the currency expression should be consistent and clear.

× The converse matter in every situation and I buy shoes once I.

✓ The converse matters in every situation, and I buy shoes once in a while.

The original sentence is incomplete and unclear. 'Converse' is likely a misuse; 'converse' should be 'converse' or 'converse' is incorrect here. Possibly 'converse' is a mistranslation or typo. The sentence needs completion and clarification.

× Well, I prefer comfortable shoes because in every situation the comfort give you relax and peace and when you wear these shoes you feel confident and get refreshed.

✓ Well, I prefer comfortable shoes because in every situation comfort gives you relaxation and peace, and when you wear these shoes you feel confident and refreshed.

'Comfort' is a singular noun and requires 'gives' (third person singular). 'Relax' should be the noun 'relaxation' to fit the sentence. 'Get refreshed' is better as 'feel refreshed' for natural expression.

× So I prefer to buy.

✓ So I prefer to buy comfortable shoes.

The sentence is incomplete and needs an object to be grammatically correct and clear.