Shoes— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to answer the question directly and clearly. Use correct vocabulary (e.g., 'shoes' instead of 'suits' or 'sauces') and avoid redundancy. Keep your answer concise and structured with a clear topic sentence and supporting details. Use linking words to connect ideas logically.

例: Yes, I like buying shoes, but I don't buy them very often. I prefer comfortable shoes like Adidas and Nike because they are easy to walk in. I enjoy exploring different styles from these brands.

提案: Answer the question directly and use correct vocabulary. Avoid filler words and unclear phrases. Use linking words to make your answer coherent. Provide specific details about your experience or opinion.

例: No, I have never bought shoes online. However, my brother once sent me a pair of Nike Jordan shoes from abroad. I really like their quality and I still use them regularly.

提案: Be clear and precise when giving numbers or amounts. Use correct vocabulary and sentence structure. Avoid unnecessary hesitation and filler words. Explain your answer with relevant reasons or examples.

例: I usually spend around 200 to 300 dirhams on shoes, depending on the brand and quality. I prefer not to buy very expensive shoes, but I focus on getting good value for money.

提案: Provide a clear opinion and support it with reasons. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. Avoid repetition and unclear phrases. Keep your answer concise and relevant.

例: I prefer comfortable shoes because I can wear them anywhere and use them every day. However, I also like fashionable shoes for special occasions, so I try to balance both.

× I didn't buy suits really often but I really like buying suits as I always prefer to wear shoes rather than heels because it will be really convenient and easy to walk and I just find and I'm exploring various types of sauces. Adidas, Nike.

✓ I don't buy shoes really often but I really like buying shoes as I always prefer to wear shoes rather than heels because it is really convenient and easy to walk and I just find and I'm exploring various types of shoes. Adidas, Nike.

The sentence incorrectly uses past tense 'didn't buy' when the context suggests a habitual action, so present tense 'don't buy' is appropriate. Also, 'suits' is incorrect; the correct word is 'shoes'. 'Will be' should be 'is' to match the present habitual context. 'Sauces' is a wrong word choice; it should be 'shoes'. These corrections improve clarity and grammatical accuracy.

× Not I have not bought shoes online but my brother has sent me a Nike suit I think the name is umm Jordan uh from the abroad.

✓ No, I have not bought shoes online but my brother has sent me a Nike shoe, I think the name is umm Jordan, from abroad.

The phrase 'Not I have not' is incorrect; it should be 'No, I have not'. 'Suit' is incorrect when referring to a single shoe; it should be 'shoe'. The article 'the' before 'abroad' is unnecessary and incorrect; 'from abroad' is correct. These changes correct pronoun usage and article errors.

× I think it depends on the quality and the suits brand. Uh, mostly I spend 223 thousands, uh, on my shoes as I don't prefer much expensive more than that, so I try to maintain the quantity of the suits as I prefer it.

✓ I think it depends on the quality and the shoe brand. Uh, mostly I spend 223 thousand, uh, on my shoes as I don't prefer anything more expensive than that, so I try to maintain the quantity of the shoes as I prefer.

'Suits brand' is incorrect; it should be 'shoe brand'. '223 thousands' is incorrect quantifier usage; it should be '223 thousand'. 'Much expensive more than that' is incorrect; it should be 'anything more expensive than that'. 'Quantity of the suits' should be 'quantity of the shoes'. These corrections fix quantifier and noun usage errors.

× I think it depends on your dressing sense or I prefer both of the shoes. But personally I prefer comfortable shoes which I can wear wherever, wherever I want to go and I can try or almost use everyday. Yeah.

✓ I think it depends on your dressing sense, but I prefer both types of shoes. But personally, I prefer comfortable shoes which I can wear wherever I want to go and I can try to use almost every day.

The phrase 'both of the shoes' is incorrect; it should be 'both types of shoes'. 'Try or almost use everyday' is unclear and incorrect; it should be 'try to use almost every day'. Also, 'everyday' as one word is an adjective; here, the adverbial phrase 'every day' is correct. These corrections improve pronoun and adverb usage for clarity.