Shoes— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Faut que tu sois plus clair pis précis dans ta réponse. Essaie de répondre directement à la question avec une phrase principale, pis ajoute des détails spécifiques avec des mots de liaison pour que ça coule mieux. Évite les répétitions pis les phrases incomplètes.

例: Yes, I like buying shoes and I usually buy them when my old ones are worn out. I prefer comfortable shoes that fit my budget, but I also buy fancy shoes for special occasions.

提案: Ta réponse manque de clarté pis de structure. Utilise des mots de liaison pour organiser tes idées, pis donne des détails précis sur ton expérience. Aussi, évite les erreurs grammaticales pour que ta réponse soit plus naturelle.

例: Yes, I bought shoes online once, but it was a bad experience because I received the wrong size. Although I could exchange them, there was no refund option, which was very frustrating.

提案: Ta réponse est confuse pis manque de fluidité. Essaie de faire une phrase principale claire, puis explique avec des détails précis en utilisant des mots de liaison. Aussi, évite les erreurs grammaticales pour que ta réponse soit plus naturelle.

例: I usually spend less than 100 dollars on shoes because I believe I can find good quality shoes at a reasonable price. I always try to stick to my budget when buying shoes.

提案: Ta réponse est bonne mais tu peux l'améliorer en corrigeant les erreurs grammaticales et en utilisant des mots de liaison pour rendre ta réponse plus fluide et naturelle. Sois précis dans tes explications.

例: I prefer comfortable shoes over fashionable ones because if the shoes don't feel good, I won't enjoy wearing them. Comfort is more important to me than appearance.

× I always buy shoes according to my comfortable and budget.

✓ I always buy shoes according to my comfort and budget.

The word 'comfortable' is an adjective, but here a noun is needed to express the concept of comfort. Using 'comfort' is correct because it refers to the state or quality of being comfortable.

× Yes, I do like the fancy shoes for special occasion.

✓ Yes, I do like fancy shoes for special occasions.

The phrase 'special occasion' should be plural 'special occasions' to match the plural noun 'shoes' and to indicate general preference for multiple occasions.

× I buy shoes whenever I need it.

✓ I buy shoes whenever I need them.

The pronoun 'it' is singular but refers to 'shoes' which is plural, so the correct pronoun is 'them'.

× I don't buy shoes occasionally.

✓ I don't buy shoes often.

The adverb 'occasionally' is incorrectly used with 'don't buy'; 'often' better expresses frequency in negative sentences.

× Whenever I feel like all these my old shoes are very.

✓ Whenever I feel like all my old shoes are worn out.

The original sentence is incomplete and unclear. Adding 'worn out' completes the thought and clarifies the meaning.

× Yes, I had bought online shoes once.

✓ Yes, I bought shoes online once.

The past perfect tense 'had bought' is unnecessary here; simple past 'bought' is appropriate for a single past event.

× I ordered a black fancy shoes of Nike brand on Amazon but when it came they were sent me a wrong size.

✓ I ordered a pair of black fancy Nike shoes on Amazon, but when they came, they sent me the wrong size.

'Shoes' is plural, so 'a black fancy shoes' is incorrect; 'a pair of shoes' is correct. Also, 'they were sent me' is incorrect; 'they sent me' is correct.

× It was very frustrated because there was no option for the refund.

✓ It was very frustrating because there was no option for a refund.

'Frustrated' is an adjective describing a person; 'frustrating' describes a situation. Also, 'the refund' should be 'a refund' as it is a general option.

× I can only exchange it but it was.

✓ I could only exchange it, but it was difficult.

The sentence is incomplete; adding 'difficult' completes the thought. Also, 'can' should be 'could' to match past tense.

× I always be careful about my budget even I think so that I don't want to spend much money on my shoes that I because I can get a good stuff with cheaper money.

✓ I am always careful about my budget because I don't want to spend much money on my shoes since I can get good stuff for less money.

'I always be careful' is incorrect; 'I am always careful' is correct. The sentence is also restructured for clarity and correct conjunction use.

× So I would recommend myself to spend not more than 100 bucks on my shoes for.

✓ So I would recommend spending not more than 100 bucks on my shoes.

'Recommend myself' is incorrect; 'recommend spending' is correct. The sentence ending 'for' is unnecessary and removed.

× That's an very interesting question.

✓ That's a very interesting question.

The article 'an' is used before vowel sounds; 'very' starts with a consonant sound, so 'a' is correct.

× I always go with the comfortableness rather than the look.

✓ I always choose comfort rather than looks.

'Comfortableness' is a less common noun form; 'comfort' is more natural. Also, 'look' should be plural 'looks' to match the comparison.

× I feel like if the shoes are good but I am of cough I don't feel comfortable.

✓ I feel like even if the shoes are good, but if I don't feel comfortable,

The phrase 'I am of cough' is incorrect and unclear; it is replaced with 'even if' to express the intended meaning.

× That means I have wasted a lot of money on that shoes.

✓ That means I have wasted a lot of money on those shoes.

'That shoes' is incorrect; 'those shoes' is the correct plural demonstrative pronoun.

× My inner happiness matter.

✓ My inner happiness matters.

'Happiness' is singular, so the verb should be 'matters' to agree in number.