Shoes— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答时应避免语法错误和表达不自然的问题，例如“the shoe can transfer the outfit”应改为“shoes can transform an outfit”。同时，回答应更简洁，避免重复表达。

例: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes and usually purchase a new pair every month because shoes can really transform an outfit and make me look more stylish.

提案: 注意语法和词汇使用，如“shares”应为“shoes”，“so many different types shoes”应为“so many different types of shoes”。句子应更流畅，避免语法错误。

例: Yes, I often buy shoes online because there are many different types to choose from, and they are usually cheaper than in physical stores.

提案: 回答可以更完整，增加连接词使句子更连贯，例如使用“because”连接原因。同时，表达应更自然。

例: I usually spend about CN¥500 on shoes because my budget is limited, so I try not to spend too much money on them.

提案: 注意语法，如“prefer to comfortable shoes”应为“prefer comfortable shoes”。回答内容具体且有逻辑，但可以使用连接词使表达更流畅。

例: I prefer comfortable shoes because I am a mother of three children, and I often take them to kindergarten or primary school, so I really need shoes that are comfortable for daily use.

× I think the shoe can transfer the outfit it make me look like more beautiful and fashion.

✓ I think shoes can transform the outfit and make me look more beautiful and fashionable.

这里'shoe'应该用复数'shoes'，因为通常说鞋子是复数形式；'make'应改为'make'，与主语'shoes'保持一致；'fashion'应改为形容词'fashionable'，表示'时尚的'。

× Yes I always bought shares online because there is so many different types shoes online to choose from and they are so cheap then buying in the shop.

✓ Yes, I always buy shoes online because there are so many different types of shoes online to choose from and they are much cheaper than buying in the shop.

'shares'应为'shoes'，词义错误；'there is'应改为'there are'，因为后面是复数名词；'types shoes'应为'types of shoes'，需要介词'of'；'then'应为'than'，比较级错误；'bought'应改为现在时'buy'，与句意一致。

× Yes I always bought shares online because there is so many different types shoes online to choose from and they are so cheap then buying in the shop.

✓ Yes, I always buy shoes online because there are so many different types of shoes online to choose from and they are much cheaper than buying in the shop.

'types shoes'缺少介词'of'，正确表达应为'types of shoes'。

× I prefer to comfortable shoes because I'm the mother.

✓ I prefer comfortable shoes because I'm a mother.

'prefer to comfortable shoes'中'prefer'后直接加形容词短语，不需要' to'；'the mother'应为'a mother'，表示泛指。

× I have 3 kids, I'll always take my kids to the kindergarten or primary school so I really need a pair of comfortable shoes for me.

✓ I have 3 kids, and I always take them to kindergarten or primary school, so I really need a pair of comfortable shoes for myself.

'I'll always take my kids'时态不合适，应为一般现在时；'the kindergarten'和'the primary school'前的定冠词可省略；'for me'应改为'for myself'，反身代词使用错误。