Shoes— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Та хариултаа илүү тодорхой, логик дараалалтай, алдаагүй хэлээр илэрхийлэх хэрэгтэй. Жишээ нь, "I rarely buy shoes, usually only before winter or summer, about every two months." гэж хэлж болно.

例: I rarely buy shoes, usually only before winter or summer, about every two months. This is because I want to prepare for the changing weather and ensure my shoes are suitable.

提案: Хэллэг, дүрмийн алдааг засаж, илүү тодорхой, байгалийн хариулт өгөх хэрэгтэй. Жишээ нь, "I have never bought shoes online because I don't trust the quality and fit." гэж хэлж болно.

例: I have never bought shoes online because I don't trust the quality and fit. I prefer to try shoes in person to make sure they are comfortable.

提案: Мөн үг, дүрмийн алдааг засаж, илүү тодорхой, логик хариулт өгөх хэрэгтэй. Жишээ нь, "I usually spend about 500,000 Mongolian tögrög on shoes, which I think is reasonable." гэж хэлж болно.

例: I usually spend about 500,000 Mongolian tögrög on shoes, which I think is reasonable. I prefer quality shoes that last longer rather than cheap ones.

提案: Хариултаа илүү тодорхой, логик дараалалтай, дүрмийн алдаагүйгээр илэрхийлэх хэрэгтэй. Жишээ нь, "I generally prefer comfortable shoes because in Mongolia's cold weather, comfort is very important." гэж хэлж болно.

例: I generally prefer comfortable shoes because in Mongolia's cold weather, comfort is very important. Although fashionable shoes look nice, I prioritize warmth and comfort.

× Umm it's often happen right before the winter and sometimes right before the summer, but maybe I buy shows maybe every two months.

✓ Umm it often happens right before the winter and sometimes right before the summer, but maybe I buy shoes maybe every two months.

The verb 'happen' should be in the third person singular present tense 'happens' to agree with the subject 'it'. Also, 'shows' is a misspelling of 'shoes'.

× To be honest, I had never buy shoes from online, uh, because I don't trust them, especially buying the shows.

✓ To be honest, I have never bought shoes online, uh, because I don't trust them, especially buying shoes.

The present perfect tense 'have never bought' is appropriate here to indicate an experience up to now. 'Had never buy' is incorrect. Also, 'from online' should be 'online', and 'shows' should be 'shoes'.

× To be honest, I had never buy shoes from online, uh, because I don't trust them, especially buying the shows.

✓ To be honest, I have never bought shoes online, uh, because I don't trust them, especially buying shoes.

The preposition 'from' is unnecessary before 'online'. The correct phrase is 'buy shoes online'.

× To be honest, I had never buy shoes from online, uh, because I don't trust them, especially buying the shows.

✓ To be honest, I have never bought shoes online, uh, because I don't trust them, especially buying shoes.

The word 'shows' is a misspelling of 'shoes'.

× Approximately it's 500,000 Turk in Mongolian currency and uh, overall that's not too much for shows.

✓ Approximately it's 500,000 Tugrik in Mongolian currency and uh, overall that's not too much for shoes.

The currency name is 'Tugrik', not 'Turk'. Also, 'shows' should be 'shoes'.

× Approximately it's 500,000 Turk in Mongolian currency and uh, overall that's not too much for shows.

✓ Approximately it's 500,000 Tugrik in Mongolian currency and uh, overall that's not too much for shoes.

The word 'shows' is a misspelling of 'shoes'.

× I generally prefer comfortable ones simply because I use it to buy my shows based on the fashion, how it looks, how it suits my outfit.

✓ I generally prefer comfortable ones simply because I choose my shoes based on fashion, how they look, and how they suit my outfit.

The pronoun 'it' is incorrect when referring to plural 'shoes'; 'they' should be used. Also, 'use it to buy my shows' is awkward; 'choose my shoes' is clearer. 'Shows' should be 'shoes'.

× I generally prefer comfortable ones simply because I use it to buy my shows based on the fashion, how it looks, how it suits my outfit.

✓ I generally prefer comfortable ones simply because I choose my shoes based on fashion, how they look, and how they suit my outfit.

The word 'shows' is a misspelling of 'shoes'.

× But that's not as comfortable during the cold weather, especially in Mongolia, it's it's very important to be comfortable.

✓ But those are not as comfortable during the cold weather, especially in Mongolia; it's very important to be comfortable.

'That's' (that is) is singular and does not agree with plural 'ones' or 'shoes'. 'Those are' is correct. Also, the sentence is run-on and needs proper punctuation.