Shoes— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat natural but contains unclear phrases like "ship alcoholic" which may confuse the listener. Try to use clear and relevant vocabulary. Also, avoid filler words like "uh" and keep your answer concise within 5 sentences. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, I really enjoy buying shoes and consider myself a shoe enthusiast. However, I don't buy them as often as I'd like. Sometimes, I prefer shopping with my friends or family because it makes the experience more enjoyable.

提案: Your answer is incomplete and contains grammatical errors. Avoid filler words like "uh" and finish your sentences clearly. Use linking words to explain your reasons logically. Also, be specific about your concerns regarding online shopping.

例: No, I have never bought shoes online because I don't trust online shopping platforms. I worry that the shoes might not fit properly, so I usually prefer buying shoes in physical stores where I can try them on.

提案: Your answer is somewhat clear but could be more structured and specific. Avoid filler words like "uh" and complete your sentences. Use linking words to connect your ideas and provide clearer comparisons.

例: The amount I spend on shoes depends on the brand. For expensive brands, I usually pay at least $100. However, if I like the material more than the brand, the price can vary and sometimes be less expensive.

提案: Your answer conveys your preference but contains some grammatical errors and filler words. Try to use complete sentences and avoid fillers. Use linking words to explain your reasons clearly and provide more specific details.

例: I prefer comfortable shoes over fashionable ones because comfort is very important to me. I care more about my health and how my shoes affect it rather than following fashion trends.

× Yes, actually I can call myself a ship alcoholic and I do love buying shoes, but unfortunately I would like to do it more often than I actually do it now.

✓ Yes, actually I can call myself a shoe addict and I do love buying shoes, but unfortunately I would like to do it more often than I actually do now.

The phrase 'ship alcoholic' is incorrect and likely a mispronunciation or misuse. The correct term is 'shoe addict' to express a strong liking for buying shoes. Also, 'do it now' is redundant; 'do now' is sufficient and more natural.

× No, I haven't had this experience before because I don't trust online shops platform at all and I often think it comes not the appropriate size of yours.

✓ No, I haven't had this experience before because I don't trust online shopping platforms at all and I often think they don't come in the appropriate size for you.

The phrase 'online shops platform' is incorrect; the correct term is 'online shopping platforms'. Also, 'it comes not the appropriate size of yours' is ungrammatical; the correct phrasing is 'they don't come in the appropriate size for you' to refer to shoes fitting properly.

× So uh, often I prefer Go and.

✓ So, uh, often I prefer to go and buy shoes in person.

The sentence 'So uh, often I prefer Go and.' is incomplete and lacks clarity. Adding 'to go and buy shoes in person' completes the thought and makes the sentence grammatically correct and meaningful.

× Well, it depends on the brand. I would say. If it is an expensive brand, it can cost at least $100. But if uh, I just like the material of the shoes, it can cost much more or less.

✓ Well, it depends on the brand. I would say if it is an expensive brand, it can cost at least $100. But if, uh, I just like the material of the shoes, it can cost more or less.

The phrase 'much more or less' is awkward and incorrect. The correct expression is 'more or less' to indicate approximate cost. Also, the period after 'I would say' is unnecessary and interrupts the sentence flow.

× Well actually I'm not a fashion and often prefer comfortable shoes because for me, uh, my comfort is much more umm, important thing.

✓ Well, actually I'm not into fashion and often prefer comfortable shoes because, for me, uh, my comfort is a much more important thing.

The phrase 'I'm not a fashion' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'I'm not into fashion' to indicate lack of interest. Also, 'much more umm, important thing' needs the article 'a' before 'much more important thing' for grammatical correctness.

× And I don't care about fashion, I more care about my health.

✓ And I don't care about fashion; I care more about my health.

The phrase 'I more care about my health' is ungrammatical. The correct word order is 'I care more about my health'. Also, the two independent clauses should be separated by a semicolon or period for clarity.