Shoes— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Apni answer e kichu grammar error ache, ar kichu sentence incomplete mone hocche. Apni chesta korun sentence gulo ke shothik vabe complete korte, ar linking words use kore answer ke aro natural ar logical banate. Apnar uttor e specific details aro bhalo hobe, jemon kon kon style apni pochondo koren, keno sneakers apnar favorite. Erokom kichu details add korun.

例: Yes, I really enjoy buying shoes because I am a big fan of different styles and designs. I usually buy shoes a few times a year, especially when I save enough money to buy branded ones. For example, I like to collect sneakers because they are very comfortable and stylish, which suits my daily activities.

提案: Apnar uttor e kichu grammar mistake ache, jemon 'have broke' er jaygay 'have bought' hobe. Apni chesta korun linking words use korte jate uttor ta aro fluent hoy. Apnar uttor e aro specific details add korte paren, jemon kon website theke kinlen, delivery experience kemon chilo, etc.

例: Yes, I bought a pair of sneakers online a couple of months ago. They were very comfortable and easy to wear. Moreover, the design was stylish and modern, and the quality was excellent. I bought them from a popular website, and the delivery was quick and reliable.

提案: Apnar uttor khub short ar unclear. Apni chesta korun proshner uttor direct dite, ar specific amount ba range bolte. Sentence gulo ke shothik grammar diye complete korun. Linking words use kore uttor ke aro bhalo banan.

例: I usually spend around 2000 to 3000 taka on shoes each time. Since I am a big fan of shoes, I save money regularly to buy good quality ones.

提案: Apnar uttor e kichu incomplete sentence ache ar kichu confusion ache. Apni chesta korun clear ar complete sentence use korte. Apnar opinion ke bistarito bhabe bolun, ar linking words use korun jate uttor ta logical hoy.

例: I prefer comfortable shoes because comfort is very important to me. Even if fashionable shoes look good, they are not useful if I cannot walk comfortably in them. Therefore, I always choose comfort over fashion when buying shoes.

× I usually buy shoes a few time a year, especially when I save money and when I enough money to buy branded ones.

✓ I usually buy shoes a few times a year, especially when I save money and when I have enough money to buy branded ones.

The word 'time' should be plural 'times' because it refers to multiple occasions. Also, the phrase 'when I enough money' is missing the verb 'have' to be grammatically correct.

× For example, I like collect sneakers because uh sneakers are very comfortable for.

✓ For example, I like collecting sneakers because sneakers are very comfortable.

After 'like', the verb should be in the '-ing' form, so 'collect' changes to 'collecting'. Also, the sentence was incomplete and 'for' at the end is unnecessary.

× Yes, I have broke a pair of sneakers online a couple of months ago.

✓ Yes, I bought a pair of sneakers online a couple of months ago.

The present perfect 'have broke' is incorrect; the past tense of 'break' is 'broke', but here the correct verb is 'bought' (past of 'buy'). Also, 'have broke' is ungrammatical; it should be either 'have broken' or simple past 'broke'. Since the time is specified ('a couple of months ago'), simple past 'bought' is appropriate.

× The design and the sneakers quality was very high and it was very stylish and modern.

✓ The design and the sneakers' quality were very high and they were very stylish and modern.

When two subjects are joined by 'and', the verb should be plural 'were'. Also, 'sneakers quality' needs a possessive apostrophe: 'sneakers' quality'. 'It' should be 'they' to refer to plural subjects.

× As I am a big fan of buying shoes, so I usually spend money buying shoes.

✓ As I am a big fan of buying shoes, I usually spend money on buying shoes.

The conjunction 'so' is redundant after 'as' and should be removed. Also, 'spend money buying shoes' is better expressed as 'spend money on buying shoes' to be grammatically correct.

× I usually save money often time to buy shoe.

✓ I usually save money often to buy shoes.

'Often time' is incorrect; 'often' alone is sufficient. 'Shoe' should be plural 'shoes' because it refers to shoes in general.

× So without I think I prefer comfortable shoes than fashionable shoes because if we cannot walk in wearing fashionable shoes, it may.

✓ So, I think I prefer comfortable shoes to fashionable shoes because if we cannot walk wearing fashionable shoes, it may be uncomfortable.

'So without' is incorrect; 'So' alone is sufficient. The comparison should use 'prefer A to B' not 'prefer A than B'. The phrase 'walk in wearing' is awkward; 'walk wearing' is better. The sentence was incomplete; adding 'be uncomfortable' completes the thought.