Shoes— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is generally clear but can be improved by making it more concise and structured. Avoid filler words like 'uh' and ensure subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'stable shoes' should be 'stable shoe' or 'stable shoes'). Also, try to use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and avoid redundancy.

例: I don't buy shoes very often because I prefer to invest in high-quality, comfortable shoes that last a long time rather than buying cheaper, uncomfortable ones.

提案: Your answer is repetitive and could be more concise. Avoid repeating phrases like 'for me' and 'really buy shoes'. Use linking words to make your answer coherent. Also, correct preposition usage ('in online' should be 'online').

例: Yes, I often buy shoes online because high-quality designs are hard to find locally. This allows me to explore various options and choose shoes that meet my standards.

提案: Your answer has grammatical errors and unclear phrases like 'careless, brand about brands'. Try to use correct verb forms and clearer vocabulary. Also, avoid filler words like 'umm'. Use linking words to contrast your spending habits.

例: I usually spend around $100 on high-quality, comfortable branded shoes. However, for everyday shoes, I prefer to spend between $20 and $30 because I don't mind the brand as much.

提案: Your answer is clear but can be improved by reducing redundancy and improving sentence flow. Avoid repeating similar ideas and use linking words to connect your points smoothly.

例: I generally prefer comfortable shoes over fashionable ones because comfort and balance are more important to me than appearance, especially since fashionable shoes like heels can be uncomfortable to walk in.

× Well, as much as like buying clothes and shoes, I don't think I buy shoes that often.

✓ Well, as much as I like buying clothes and shoes, I don't think I buy shoes that often.

The sentence is missing the subject 'I' before the verb 'like'. In English, the subject is necessary before verbs in present tense to form a correct sentence structure.

× I prefer to buy a good higher quality, uh, stable shoes rather than buying shoes that are uncomfortable or cheaper in quality.

✓ I prefer to buy good higher quality, uh, stable shoes rather than buying shoes that are uncomfortable or cheaper in quality.

The phrase 'a good higher quality, uh, stable shoes' incorrectly mixes singular article 'a' with plural noun 'shoes'. Removing 'a' corrects the singular/plural agreement.

× Several times I prefer to invest in a good shoe that is comfortable and long lasting.

✓ Several times I prefer to invest in good shoes that are comfortable and long lasting.

The phrase 'a good shoe' is singular, but 'several times' implies multiple instances, so plural 'shoes' fits better for consistency.

× Well, absolutely. I buy shoes most of the time in online in general because some designs and products that are of high quality are really hard to find locally.

✓ Well, absolutely. I buy shoes most of the time online in general because some designs and products that are of high quality are really hard to find locally.

The preposition 'in' is incorrectly used before 'online'. The correct phrase is 'buy shoes online' without 'in'.

× So for me, I really buy shoes often so I can explore through different pages being the shoes that are of quality or whether they meet my standards or not.

✓ So for me, I really buy shoes often so I can explore different pages to find shoes that are of quality or whether they meet my standards or not.

The phrase 'explore through different pages being the shoes' is incorrect. 'Explore different pages to find shoes' is the correct structure. 'Being' is misused here.

× Well, I think I most of the time spends around $100 for umm, higher quality shoes that are comfortable and of high brand.

✓ Well, I think I most of the time spend around $100 for umm, higher quality shoes that are comfortable and of high brand.

The verb 'spends' does not agree with the subject 'I'. The correct form is 'I spend' in present tense.

× But if I were to buy a shoe for everyday stuff or shoes that I wear to be comfortable, careless, brand about brands, I would buy shoes in about $20 to $30 category.

✓ But if I were to buy a shoe for everyday stuff or shoes that I wear to be comfortable, careless about brands, I would buy shoes in about the $20 to $30 category.

The phrase 'careless, brand about brands' is incorrect. It should be 'careless about brands'. Also, 'in about $20 to $30 category' needs the definite article 'the' before the price range.

× Well, I most of the time in general prefer comfortable shoes because I'd rather be comfortable than fashionable.

✓ Well, I most of the time generally prefer comfortable shoes because I'd rather be comfortable than fashionable.

The phrase 'most of the time in general' is awkward. 'Most of the time generally' or 'generally' is better for expressing frequency in present tense.

× I prefer my comfort and balance when I'm wearing shoes in general.

✓ I prefer my comfort and balance when I'm wearing shoes, in general.

Adding a comma before 'in general' clarifies the sentence. The phrase 'in general' is an adverbial phrase modifying the whole sentence and should be set off by commas.