Shoes— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is enthusiastic but a bit repetitive and lacks coherence. Try to avoid filler words like 'uh' and use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly. Also, be careful with plural forms and sentence structure to sound more natural.

例: Yes, I really love buying different types of shoes because I am passionate about footwear. For example, I often buy sneakers in various colors and designs. Usually, I purchase new shoes every two months.

提案: Your answer covers the main points but has some grammatical errors and redundancy. Try to use linking words like 'because' or 'so' to connect ideas and avoid repeating the same phrases. Also, improve sentence structure for clarity.

例: Yes, I have bought shoes online many times, including last week. I find it very convenient because we can see pictures and sizes clearly, so it saves a lot of time compared to visiting physical stores.

提案: Your answer provides relevant information but lacks fluency and has some awkward phrasing. Avoid using filler words like 'like' unnecessarily. Try to structure your answer with a clear topic sentence followed by specific details, and use linking words to improve coherence.

例: I don't usually keep track of my spending, but I estimate that I spend around 7000 to 8000 rupees per month on shoes because I have a large and diverse collection.

提案: Your answer expresses your opinion clearly but includes filler words and some repetition. Try to use linking words such as 'however' or 'because' to connect your ideas smoothly. Also, avoid hesitation sounds to sound more confident.

例: In my opinion, shoes should be both fashionable and comfortable; however, if I have to choose one, I prefer comfortable shoes because even if they are stylish, I cannot wear them every day if they cause discomfort.

× Yes, I really do love buying different type of shoes.

✓ Yes, I really do love buying different types of shoes.

The word 'type' should be plural 'types' because it refers to more than one kind of shoe. In English, when talking about multiple kinds or categories, the plural form is used.

× I usually buy shoes bi monthly.

✓ I usually buy shoes bi-monthly.

The term 'bi monthly' should be hyphenated as 'bi-monthly' to correctly function as an adverb describing frequency. Also, 'bi-monthly' means every two months or twice a month, so clarity is important.

× even I bought the online shoes last week.

✓ even I bought shoes online last week.

The phrase 'the online shoes' is incorrect because 'online' is an adverb here, not an adjective modifying 'shoes'. The correct structure is 'bought shoes online'. Also, the definite article 'the' is unnecessary here.

× I think it's really convenient way to buy shoes like we can see their pictures and sizes online and we can choose our shoes and buy online.

✓ I think it's a really convenient way to buy shoes because we can see their pictures and sizes online, and we can choose our shoes and buy them online.

The sentence lacks the article 'a' before 'really convenient way'. Also, 'like' is informal and should be replaced with 'because' to show reason. Adding 'them' after 'buy' clarifies the object.

× Like I have very vast and huge collection of shoes.

✓ Like I have a very vast and huge collection of shoes.

The noun 'collection' is singular and requires the article 'a' before it. Without the article, the sentence is grammatically incorrect.