Shoes— Part 1 採点レポート

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例: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes quite often because I like to match them with my style and the clothes I own. It’s interesting for me to find shoes that complement my outfits.

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例: No, I have never bought shoes online because I think it’s not safe. There are many scammers from other countries, so I prefer to buy shoes from my own country.

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例: I usually spend quite a lot of money on shoes because comfort is very important. Since I walk a lot every day, I need shoes that are comfortable and durable.

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例: I prefer both fashionable and comfortable shoes depending on the situation. For example, if I wear formal clothes, I choose fashionable shoes, but for sportswear, I prefer comfortable ones.

× I like buy buying shoes very often because I'm matching my shoes with my style and with my what kind of clothes I have.

✓ I like buying shoes very often because I match my shoes with my style and with the kind of clothes I have.

The phrase 'like buy buying' is incorrect; 'like' should be followed by the gerund form 'buying'. Also, 'I'm matching' is incorrect here because the action is habitual, so simple present 'I match' is appropriate.

× Uh, no, I've never been. I know I've ever never got shoes online because it's not safe nowadays because there is lots of scammers from other countries.

✓ Uh, no, I've never bought shoes online because it's not safe nowadays as there are lots of scammers from other countries.

The phrase 'I've never been' is incorrect in this context; the correct verb is 'bought' for past action of purchasing. Also, 'I've ever never got' is ungrammatical; 'I've never bought' is correct. 'There is lots of scammers' should be 'there are lots of scammers' due to plural noun.

× So you can't believe other other people and that's why I'm buying shoes from my own country.

✓ So you can't trust other people, and that's why I buy shoes from my own country.

The phrase 'believe other people' is less appropriate than 'trust other people' in this context. Also, 'I'm buying' suggests current action; habitual action is better expressed as 'I buy'.

× I often spend lots of money on my shoes because it's the most, uh, comfortable place.

✓ I often spend a lot of money on my shoes because they are the most comfortable.

'Lots of money' is acceptable, but 'lots of money on my shoes' is better as 'a lot of money'. Also, 'it's the most comfortable place' is incorrect; shoes are not a place. The correct phrase is 'they are the most comfortable'.

× That should be weird, uh, because you everyday walking about.

✓ That should be weird, uh, because you walk around every day.

'You everyday walking about' is ungrammatical. The correct form is 'you walk around every day' to express habitual action.

× For example, me, I'm walking about 10,000, uh, 10,000 kilometers a day, so it should be comfortable for me.

✓ For example, I walk about 10,000 steps a day, so my shoes should be comfortable for me.

Walking 10,000 kilometers a day is unrealistic; likely the speaker meant 'steps'. Also, 'I'm walking' can be simplified to 'I walk' for habitual action.

× I would prefer both of them because it depends what kind of style or what kind of shoes are they.

✓ I would prefer both of them because it depends on what kind of style or what kind of shoes they are.

The phrase 'what kind of shoes are they' is incorrect word order in indirect question; correct form is 'what kind of shoes they are'. Also, 'depends' requires 'on' after it.

× If I have for example old money, a style so I would prefer fashionable shoes, but if I have for example sport, sports clothes so I would prefer comfortable shoes.

✓ If I have, for example, an old money style, I would prefer fashionable shoes, but if I have, for example, sports clothes, I would prefer comfortable shoes.

Missing articles before 'old money style' and 'sports clothes'. Also, commas are needed for clarity around 'for example'.