Shoes— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is generally clear but could be more natural and complete. Avoid incomplete sentences like 'Mostly focus on practical and comfortable shoes that meet my daily.' Instead, complete the thought and add linking words to improve coherence. Also, try to avoid redundancy by combining ideas more effectively.

例: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes, but I don't do it very often. Usually, I buy one or two pairs each year, focusing mainly on practical and comfortable shoes that suit my daily needs.

提案: There are some grammatical errors and unclear phrases in your answer, such as 'I have both shoes online before' and 'if I lived.' Try to use correct verb forms and complete sentences. Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and provide specific details about your experience.

例: Yes, I have bought shoes online before. I usually use an online shopping platform called Jingdong in China, which offers a wide variety of shoes. It is really convenient because I can easily compare different styles and prices without leaving my home.

提案: Your answer provides relevant information but lacks coherence and contains a small inconsistency in the price range. Use linking words to connect your ideas and ensure accuracy in numbers. Also, try to form complete sentences for clarity.

例: The average price for one pair of shoes in China is about CN¥200. Since I usually buy one or two pairs each year, I spend around CN¥400 to CN¥500 annually.

提案: Your answer addresses the question but contains grammatical errors and awkward phrasing, such as 'better suited my daily activities' and 'requires a shoes have a good support.' Make sure to use correct prepositions and singular/plural forms. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas and provide clear examples.

例: I prefer comfortable shoes because they are better suited to my daily activities and exercise routines. For example, I often play badminton, which requires shoes that provide good support and comfort.

× Mostly focus on practical and comfortable shoes that meet my daily.

✓ I mostly focus on practical and comfortable shoes that meet my daily needs.

The original sentence lacks a subject and is incomplete, making it a sentence structure error. Adding 'I' as the subject and completing the phrase with 'needs' makes the sentence grammatically correct and clear.

× Yes, I have both shoes online before.

✓ Yes, I have bought shoes online before.

The verb 'have' is incorrectly used instead of the past participle 'bought' after 'have' to form the present perfect tense. The correct form is 'have bought' to indicate an action completed at an unspecified time before now.

× I usually use an online shopping platform called Jingdong in China, which offers a wide variety of shoes to choose from if I lived.

✓ I usually use an online shopping platform called Jingdong in China, which offers a wide variety of shoes to choose from.

The phrase 'if I lived' is incomplete and does not fit the sentence context, causing a sentence structure error. Removing this phrase corrects the sentence and maintains clarity.

× Really convenient because I can easily compare different styles and places without leaving my home.

✓ It is really convenient because I can easily compare different styles and prices without leaving my home.

The word 'places' is incorrect in this context; the intended meaning is likely 'prices'. This is an incorrect use of a noun where a different noun is required. Replacing 'places' with 'prices' corrects the meaning.

× so that would be 400 to CN¥500.

✓ so that would be CN¥400 to CN¥500.

The quantifier '400 to CN¥500' is inconsistent; the currency symbol should precede both amounts for clarity and correctness. Placing 'CN¥' before both numbers corrects the quantifier usage.

× I prefer comfortable shoes because they are better suited my daily activities and exercise routines.

✓ I prefer comfortable shoes because they are better suited to my daily activities and exercise routines.

The verb 'suited' requires the preposition 'to' to correctly link it to the object. Omitting 'to' is a preposition error. Adding 'to' corrects the sentence.

× For example, I often play badminton which requires a shoes have a good support and comfortable.

✓ For example, I often play badminton, which requires shoes to have good support and be comfortable.

The original sentence is ungrammatical and confusing due to incorrect sentence structure and word choice. 'A shoes' is incorrect (singular article with plural noun), and the verb phrase is incomplete. Correcting the article, adding 'to have', and restructuring the sentence improves clarity and grammar.