Shoes— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Та илүү тодорхой, энгийн бөгөөд байгалийн хариулт өгөх хэрэгтэй. Жишээ нь, "Yes, I like buying shoes because it makes me happy. I usually buy shoes twice a year because Mongolia has four seasons, so I need different shoes for each season." гэж хэлж болно.

例: Yes, I like buying shoes because it makes me happy. I usually buy shoes twice a year because Mongolia has four seasons, so I need different shoes for each season.

提案: Хариултаа илүү бүтэн, тодорхой болгох хэрэгтэй. Жишээ нь, "Yes, I have bought shoes online. About seven years ago, I bought boots from a Chinese online store. The boots were very comfortable and affordable." гэж хэлж болно.

例: Yes, I have bought shoes online. About seven years ago, I bought boots from a Chinese online store. The boots were very comfortable and affordable.

提案: Хариултаа илүү логик, тодорхой болгох хэрэгтэй. Жишээ нь, "It depends on the type of shoes. In winter, I buy boots which are more expensive than summer shoes. Overall, I spend about $400 a year on shoes." гэж хэлж болно.

例: It depends on the type of shoes. In winter, I buy boots which are more expensive than summer shoes. Overall, I spend about $400 a year on shoes.

提案: Илүү энгийн, байгалийн хэллэг ашиглаж, үг давтагдлыг багасгах хэрэгтэй. Жишээ нь, "I prefer comfortable shoes because I care about my feet. Therefore, I usually choose comfort over fashion." гэж хэлж болно.

例: I prefer comfortable shoes because I care about my feet. Therefore, I usually choose comfort over fashion.

× it's makes me feel happy

✓ it makes me feel happy

The subject 'it' is third person singular, so the verb should be 'makes' without 'is'. 'It's makes' is incorrect because 'it's' is a contraction of 'it is', which does not fit here.

× Mongolians, Mongolia have four season

✓ Mongolians, Mongolia have four seasons

The noun 'season' should be plural 'seasons' because there are four of them. Using singular 'season' is incorrect when referring to multiple seasons.

× I often twice a year

✓ I often buy shoes twice a year

The phrase 'I often twice a year' is incomplete and lacks a verb. Adding 'buy shoes' clarifies the action and corrects the sentence structure.

× Mongolians, Mongolia have four season

✓ Mongolians and Mongolia have four seasons

The original sentence lacks a conjunction to connect 'Mongolians' and 'Mongolia'. Adding 'and' improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× That's why we have to wear seasonal clothes especially

✓ That's why we especially have to wear seasonal clothes

The adverb 'especially' should be placed before the verb phrase 'have to wear' for correct emphasis and natural word order.

× Yes, I have ever bought shoes online

✓ Yes, I have bought shoes online

'Ever' is not used in affirmative sentences with present perfect. It is typically used in questions or negatives. Removing 'ever' corrects the sentence.

× that time my boot was uh

✓ At that time, I bought boots

The original sentence is incomplete and unclear. Adding 'At that time' and clarifying the action improves sentence structure and meaning.

× It depends on the which shoes

✓ It depends on which shoes

The article 'the' is unnecessary before 'which shoes'. Removing 'the' corrects the phrase.

× boots are specially expensive then summer shoes

✓ boots are especially expensive compared to summer shoes

'Specially' is incorrect here; the correct adverb is 'especially'. Also, 'then' should be 'compared to' to show comparison.

× it's around. $400.00 in a year

✓ I spend around $400.00 in a year

The original sentence fragment lacks a subject and verb. Adding 'I spend' completes the sentence.

× I conscious to my uh, feet, uh, for comfortable

✓ I am conscious of my feet for comfort

The verb 'conscious' requires the verb 'am' and the preposition 'of'. Also, 'for comfortable' should be 'for comfort' (noun form).

× I usually choose comfortable shoes than fashionable shoes

✓ I usually choose comfortable shoes rather than fashionable shoes

The phrase 'choose ... than' is incorrect. The correct conjunction is 'rather than' to compare preferences.