Shoes— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answerは自然で効果的ですが、もう少し具体的な頻度や理由を加えると良いです。例えば、どのくらいの頻度で買うのか、なぜそれが楽しいのかを明確に述べましょう。

例: Yes, I like buying shoes quite often, usually once every two months. When I visit a Nike store in Tokyo, I enjoy seeing the latest fashionable designs, which makes the experience both relaxing and exciting.

提案: 答えは直接的ですが、理由をもう少し詳しく説明し、リンクワードを使って論理的に話すと良いです。例えば、なぜサイズが合わなかったのか、今後どうするかを加えましょう。

例: Yes, I have bought shoes online from Amazon.com. However, the size was completely different from mine because I couldn't try them on beforehand. Therefore, I think buying shoes online is not very reliable for me.

提案: 答えが少し混乱しています。現在の状況と過去の支出を明確に区別し、具体的に答えましょう。また、接続詞を使って文をつなげると良いです。

例: Currently, I am saving money to travel abroad, so I don't spend much on shoes. However, in the past, I usually spent about A510,000 when buying new shoes.

提案: 答えは明確ですが、理由が少し繰り返しになっています。接続詞を使い、理由を簡潔にまとめるとより効果的です。

例: Definitely, I prefer comfortable shoes because fashionable ones are relatively expensive and beyond my budget, so comfort and affordability are more important to me.

× So I spent about ¥10,000 buying new shoes.

✓ So I spend about ¥10,000 buying new shoes.

The student is talking about their usual spending habit, which requires the present tense 'spend' instead of the past tense 'spent'. Using past tense here is inconsistent with the context of habitual action.