Shoes— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Tu respuesta es clara pero contiene pausas y muletillas que afectan la naturalidad. Además, la respuesta es un poco larga y redundante. Intenta ser más conciso y evitar palabras como "umm" o "uh" para sonar más natural y fluido.

例: I don't really enjoy buying shoes because it takes a lot of time and can be stressful. So, I usually go to the store quickly, pick the right pair, and leave.

提案: Tu respuesta tiene errores gramaticales y falta de coherencia, además de muletillas. Debes mejorar la estructura y usar conectores para que la respuesta sea más clara y natural.

例: Yes, I often buy shoes online. At first, it was difficult because I wasn't sure about the size or style, but now it's fast and convenient. I usually visit my favorite brand's website to make a purchase.

提案: Tu respuesta tiene errores gramaticales y es un poco confusa. Intenta estructurar mejor tus ideas y usar vocabulario adecuado para expresar tus razones claramente.

例: I usually spend more money on shoes because I prefer expensive but durable ones. Although they cost more, they last two or three years, so I save money in the long run.

提案: Tu respuesta es incompleta y contiene muchas muletillas. Debes evitar pausas innecesarias y completar tus ideas para que la respuesta sea coherente y natural.

例: I prefer comfortable shoes over fashionable ones because I spend most of my time at home working or exercising. For example, I like wearing sneakers because they help me feel relaxed.

× I think it's a time consuming process and sometimes it stresses me out.

✓ I think it's a time-consuming process and sometimes it stresses me out.

The phrase 'time consuming' should be hyphenated to form a compound adjective 'time-consuming' that correctly modifies the noun 'process'. Without the hyphen, it can be misread as two separate words rather than a single descriptive term.

× when I need to buy some pair of shoes, I just go to the shop as quick as possible

✓ when I need to buy a pair of shoes, I just go to the shop as quickly as possible

The phrase 'some pair of shoes' is incorrect because 'pair' is singular and should be preceded by the article 'a'. Also, 'as quick as possible' should be 'as quickly as possible' because 'quickly' is the correct adverb form modifying the verb 'go'.

× choose the right pair of shoes out and go out.

✓ choose the right pair of shoes and go out.

The word 'out' after 'shoes' is unnecessary and incorrect here. The phrase 'choose the right pair of shoes' is sufficient. The second 'go out' is correct as it indicates leaving the shop.

× But nowadays is fast and comfort and when I need a pair of shoes, I just go to the website of the my favorite brand and.

✓ But nowadays it is fast and comfortable, and when I need a pair of shoes, I just go to the website of my favorite brand.

The sentence is missing the subject 'it' before 'is'. Also, 'comfort' should be the adjective 'comfortable' to describe the process. The phrase 'the my favorite brand' is incorrect; 'the' should be removed before 'my'.

× I think I spend more money than most people because I try to choose a expensive but durable pair of shoes

✓ I think I spend more money than most people because I try to choose an expensive but durable pair of shoes

The article 'a' should be 'an' before a word starting with a vowel sound like 'expensive'.

× because I can use it last until they almost worn out.

✓ because I can use them until they are almost worn out.

The pronoun 'it' is incorrect for 'pair of shoes' which is plural, so 'them' is correct. Also, 'last' should be omitted or rephrased, and 'worn out' needs the auxiliary verb 'are' to form the passive voice correctly.

× So that and this process can be two or three years.

✓ So that process can last two or three years.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. 'So that and this process' is incorrect. The corrected sentence clarifies the meaning and corrects the structure.

× I prefer comfortable shoes rather than fashionable ones because I spent most of my time at home, uh, working or exercising.

✓ I prefer comfortable shoes to fashionable ones because I spend most of my time at home, uh, working or exercising.

The correct preposition after 'prefer' is 'to' not 'rather than'. Also, 'spent' should be 'spend' to match the present tense context.

× So, uh, I prefer, for example, as sneakers, uh, in order to feel, uh, relaxed and for instance, when I do some.

✓ So, uh, I prefer, for example, sneakers, uh, in order to feel, uh, relaxed, for instance, when I do some exercise.

The preposition 'as' before 'sneakers' is incorrect and should be removed. The sentence is incomplete; adding 'exercise' completes the thought. Also, commas improve clarity.