Shoes— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不自然的问题，例如“can't ex express”应为“can express”，且“seasonal boat”表达不清。建议简化句子结构，避免重复和错误，表达更自然流畅。

例: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes because they help me express my personal style. However, I only buy them occasionally, maybe once every few months or each season.

提案: 回答中有语法错误，如“have both shoes online”应为“have bought shoes online”，且句子较长且不够连贯。建议使用连接词使句子更流畅，并注意语法准确。

例: Yes, I have bought shoes online several times because it is very convenient and offers many options. However, I have to wait a few days for delivery and cannot try them on before buying.

提案: 回答表达混乱，语法错误较多，信息不清晰。建议简化表达，直接说明花费范围，并用正确的语法和词汇描述。

例: I usually spend around CN¥200 on shoes, but sometimes I buy famous brand shoes that cost up to CN¥2000 because they look good and are comfortable.

提案: 回答语法和表达错误较多，句子不连贯，意思不明确。建议清晰表达观点，使用正确的语法，并用具体例子支持观点。

例: I care about both, but if I have to choose, I prefer fashionable shoes. For example, I have a pair that looks beautiful but hurts my feet, yet I still wear them often.

× Yes, I really enjoy buying shoes because they can't ex express my personal style.

✓ Yes, I really enjoy buying shoes because they can express my personal style.

句中“can't ex express”是拼写错误，应为“can express”，表示能够表达个人风格。

× However, I only buy them occasionally, maybe once every few months or the seasonal boat.

✓ However, I only buy them occasionally, maybe once every few months or every season.

“the seasonal boat”是错误表达，应为“every season”，表示每个季节。

× Sure, I have both shoes online several times because shopping online in China is very convenient and offers a wide variety of options, but there are some drawbacks, such as having to wait a few days for delivery and try them.

✓ Sure, I have bought shoes online several times because shopping online in China is very convenient and offers a wide variety of options, but there are some drawbacks, such as having to wait a few days for delivery and trying them on.

“have both shoes”应为“have bought shoes”，动词时态错误；“try them”应为“trying them on”，动词形式和搭配错误。

× Umm, actually it's no regular, sometimes just for CN¥200, but sometimes when I sold uh, famous brand shoes and wears pretty appearance and suitable inside, maybe for CN¥2000.

✓ Umm, actually it's not regular, sometimes just around CN¥200, but sometimes when I buy famous brand shoes that look good and fit well, maybe around CN¥2000.

“it's no regular”应为“it's not regular”，否定形式错误；“when I sold”应为“when I buy”，时态错误；“wears pretty appearance and suitable inside”表达不清，应改为“that look good and fit well”。

× I care about those of them, but if I have to choose I prefer fashionable shoes because I have one boost my and it hurts my feet but it really beautiful so that I always wear it.

✓ I care about both of them, but if I have to choose, I prefer fashionable shoes because I have a pair that boosts my confidence, and although it hurts my feet, it is really beautiful, so I always wear it.

“those of them”应为“both of them”，代词使用错误；“I have one boost my”表达不完整，应补充“a pair that boosts my confidence”；“it really beautiful”缺少系动词，应为“it is really beautiful”。