Shoes— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to avoid filler words like 'uh' and give a clear, direct answer. Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and provide a bit more detail about why you buy shoes at that frequency.

例: Yes, I like buying shoes. Usually, I prefer to buy new ones every six months or sometimes once a year because I want to keep my collection updated and comfortable.

提案: Avoid hesitation and unclear phrases. Structure your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details using linking words. Be specific about your experience and reasons for your opinion.

例: Yes, I have bought shoes online once. At first, they fit perfectly and were the right size; however, after some time, they became too small. Therefore, I have decided not to shop for shoes online anymore.

提案: Try to speak more clearly and avoid filler words. Give a direct answer with specific details and use linking words to explain your reasoning.

例: I usually spend around 3,000 to 4,000 rupees on shoes because if they are too expensive, I hesitate to use them daily.

提案: Reduce hesitation and filler words. Use linking words to connect your ideas clearly and provide specific reasons for your preference.

例: I prefer comfortable shoes rather than fashionable ones because when shoes are comfortable, I can walk and run easily without feeling any pain or distraction.

× Yes, I'd like to buy uh, shoes.

✓ Yes, I like to buy shoes.

The use of 'I'd like to buy' suggests a polite request or desire, but in response to 'Do you like buying shoes?', the simple present 'I like to buy' is more appropriate to express habitual preference.

× Uh, usually I prefer after, uh, six months or maybe one year after.

✓ Usually, I prefer to buy shoes every six months or maybe once a year.

The phrase 'prefer after six months' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'prefer to buy every six months' to indicate frequency.

× Yes uh, what time I bought uh shoes from online and after uh, then I purchased it uh, it is perfectly and it is nice size, but uh, after some time they, they are becoming a small.

✓ Yes, I once bought shoes online, and then I purchased them. They were perfect and the right size, but after some time, they became small.

The sentence has tense inconsistencies and awkward phrasing. 'What time I bought' is incorrect; 'I once bought' is better. 'It is perfectly' should be 'They were perfect'. 'They are becoming a small' should be 'they became small' to maintain past tense.

× So from now onwards I don't uh shop from online.

✓ So from now onwards, I don't shop online.

The phrase 'shop from online' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'shop online'. Also, 'don't' is appropriate here to express present habitual action.

× I, uh, spent usually, uh, 3 to 4000 on my shoes because, uh, uh, if it is, you know, too much costly, then the I don't want to be used for a routine.

✓ I usually spend 3 to 4000 on my shoes because if they are too costly, then I don't want to use them for routine wear.

The verb 'spent' is past tense but the context is habitual, so 'spend' (present tense) is correct. Also, 'if it is too much costly' is incorrect; 'if they are too costly' is correct. 'I don't want to be used' should be 'I don't want to use them'.

× Which do you prefer, fashionable shoes or comfortable shoes? I prefer the comfortable shoes over fashionable shoes because I believe if they are comfortable, then you can walk easily and uh, your attention are not toward the shoes or towards the pain and uh, you can easily run, walk, uh, and you can do, uh.

✓ I prefer comfortable shoes over fashionable shoes because I believe if they are comfortable, then you can walk easily and your attention is not on the shoes or the pain, and you can easily run and walk.

The pronoun 'your attention are' is incorrect; it should be 'your attention is' to agree with singular noun 'attention'. Also, 'toward the pain' is awkward; 'on the pain' is better. The sentence is also cleaned for clarity.