Shoes— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答时应避免重复和语气词，句子结构应更清晰。可以直接回答问题，然后用具体细节支持，比如购买鞋子的频率和原因。

例: I don't like buying shoes very much because I prefer spending money on books. I usually buy shoes only once a year when my old ones are worn out.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不清，应注意主谓一致和句子完整。建议用连贯的句子表达购买经历和便利性。

例: Yes, I have bought shoes online because it is very convenient. For example, I usually receive the delivery within two days after ordering.

提案: 回答不够连贯且有语法错误，表达不清。建议直接说明预算，并解释原因，避免重复和不完整句子。

例: I usually spend about 200 Chinese Yuan on shoes because I think that is a reasonable price. I avoid expensive or trendy shoes because they are not suitable for me.

提案: 回答中有语气词和不完整句子，建议用更流畅的表达，清楚说明偏好并给出具体原因。

例: I prefer comfortable shoes because I wear them every day. For example, I usually choose simple shoes for daily use, as fashionable shoes are not suitable for me.

× I don't like buying shoes because I I'm not interested in these material things.

✓ I don't like buying shoes because I'm not interested in these material things.

句子中出现了重复的主语“I”，应删除多余的“I”以符合英语语法。

× I don't like buying shoes because I I'm not interested in these material things.

✓ I don't like buying shoes because I'm not interested in these material things.

此句中“these material things”使用复数形式正确，无需修改。

× if I had to choose, I prefer to buy some books umm, but actually umm, I will buy it once a year umm because umm sometimes need to replace it.

✓ If I had to choose, I would prefer to buy some books, but actually, I buy them once a year because sometimes they need to be replaced.

条件句中使用虚拟语气，应使用“would prefer”而非“prefer”；“will buy it”改为一般现在时“buy them”更符合习惯表达；“sometimes need to replace it”缺少主语和被动语态，应改为“they need to be replaced”。

× I will buy it once a year umm because umm sometimes need to replace it.

✓ I buy them once a year because sometimes they need to be replaced.

“it”指代不明确，应使用复数“them”指代“books”；“sometimes need to replace it”缺少主语，应补充主语“they”，并使用被动语态。

× Yes, I have ever bought her shoes because on online shopping is very convenient for me.

✓ Yes, I have bought shoes online because online shopping is very convenient for me.

“have ever bought her shoes”中“her”使用错误，应去掉；“on online shopping”应改为“online shopping”。

× Yes, I have ever bought her shoes because on online shopping is very convenient for me.

✓ Yes, I have bought shoes online because online shopping is very convenient for me.

“on online shopping”中的介词“on”使用错误，应直接使用副词“online”。

× Umm for example I can receive the delivery after I order it, maybe 2 days.

✓ For example, I can receive the delivery about 2 days after I order it.

时间状语应放在句中更自然，且“maybe 2 days”表达不准确，应改为“about 2 days”。

× Generally, I will spend shoes about CN¥200 actually, and may if the if the price overseas money and I will feel expensive.

✓ Generally, I will spend about CN¥200 on shoes, and if the price is in foreign currency, I will feel it is expensive.

“spend shoes”缺少介词，应为“spend on shoes”；“may if the if the price overseas money”语序混乱，应调整为“if the price is in foreign currency”。

× Generally, I will spend shoes about CN¥200 actually, and may if the if the price overseas money and I will feel expensive.

✓ Generally, I will spend about CN¥200 on shoes, and if the price is in foreign currency, I will feel it is expensive.

“may”使用不当，应去掉；“about CN¥200”表达正确。

× So I don't want to buy some, uh, modern shoes and, and I think this price is appropriate for me and it's smooth and.

✓ So I don't want to buy modern shoes, and I think this price is appropriate for me.

句子末尾“and it's smooth and”不完整，应删除；“some”在此处可省略。

× If I had to pick, I would go with comfortable shoes because it's my day life.

✓ If I had to pick, I would go with comfortable shoes because they suit my daily life.

“it's my day life”表达不准确，应改为“they suit my daily life”以指代鞋子并表达适合日常生活。

× For example, in some occasions, umm I prefer wearing the common shoes and uh.

✓ For example, on some occasions, I prefer wearing common shoes.

“in some occasions”应改为“on some occasions”；“the common shoes”中“the”不必要，应去掉。

× As for the fashionable shoes, umm I think it's not appropriate for me and not for fit for me.

✓ As for fashionable shoes, I think they are not appropriate for me and do not fit me.

“it's”指代不明确，应改为“they”；“not for fit for me”语法错误，应改为“do not fit me”。