Shoes— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains hesitations and incomplete thoughts. Try to give a clear, concise response directly addressing the question, and avoid filler words. Also, use correct prepositions and complete your ideas.

例: I don't particularly enjoy buying shoes, but I often purchase them because I play outdoor sports like basketball and soccer, which require specific footwear.

提案: Your answer is understandable but contains grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Use past simple tense correctly and avoid unnecessary filler words. Also, use linking words to make your answer more coherent.

例: No, I have never bought shoes online because I believe it's important to try them on to ensure they fit well. Therefore, I prefer buying shoes in physical stores rather than online.

提案: Your answer is confusing due to unclear numbers and tense inconsistency. Use clear and realistic figures, and maintain consistent verb tenses. Also, explain your reasoning more clearly.

例: I usually spend between $30 and $40 on shoes. However, since shoes have become more expensive recently, I often buy them from outlet stores to save money.

提案: Your answer conveys your preference but has grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Use comparative forms correctly and provide clearer reasons with linking words.

例: I prefer comfortable shoes rather than fashionable ones because they fit my feet better and allow me to work more comfortably throughout the day.

× I'm not a big fan on shoes but I often buy shoes because I do a lot of outdoor activities like basketball, soccer and I need uh like pre previous umm.

✓ I'm not a big fan of shoes but I often buy shoes because I do a lot of outdoor activities like basketball, soccer and I need uh like previous ones.

The phrase 'big fan on' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'of' after 'fan'. Also, 'pre previous' is redundant and unclear; 'previous ones' is more appropriate here.

× No, I had never bought shoes online because I think you have to try in real time that you can make sure that you fit the shoes well.

✓ No, I have never bought shoes online because I think you have to try them on in person to make sure that the shoes fit well.

The past perfect tense 'had never bought' is incorrect here; present perfect 'have never bought' is appropriate for experience up to now. Also, 'try in real time' is awkward; 'try them on in person' is clearer and grammatically correct. 'You fit the shoes well' should be 'the shoes fit well' or 'they fit you well'.

× So I would rather to buy shoes in real shops than, uh, online shops.

✓ So I would rather buy shoes in real shops than, uh, online shops.

The modal phrase 'would rather' is followed directly by the base verb without 'to'. Therefore, 'would rather to buy' is incorrect; it should be 'would rather buy'.

× I think around $3090.00 to $4090.00 in my past experience.

✓ I think I usually spend around $3090.00 to $4090.00 based on my past experience.

The original sentence is incomplete and lacks a verb. Adding 'I usually spend' clarifies the meaning and corrects the sentence structure.

× But nowadays shoes are getting much more expensive than before so I usually bought an outlet.

✓ But nowadays shoes are getting much more expensive than before, so I usually buy from outlets.

The phrase 'I usually bought' mixes present adverb 'usually' with past tense 'bought'. It should be present tense 'buy' to match 'nowadays' and 'usually'. Also, 'an outlet' is incorrect; 'from outlets' is more natural.

× I like comfortable shoes more than fashion shoes because comfortable shoes can be more fit in your feet and make your work more nicely and comfortable.

✓ I like comfortable shoes more than fashionable shoes because comfortable shoes fit your feet better and make your work more comfortable and easier.

'Fashion shoes' should be 'fashionable shoes' to use the correct adjective form. 'Can be more fit in your feet' is incorrect; 'fit your feet better' is correct. 'Make your work more nicely' is incorrect; 'make your work more comfortable and easier' is clearer and grammatically correct.