Shoes— Part 1 採点レポート

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例: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes because it allows me to spend quality time with my friends and family. Moreover, shopping together gives us a chance to explore new styles and find something unique. I usually go to the shops with my family, which makes the experience even more enjoyable.

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例: Yes, I often buy shoes online because it is convenient and offers a wide variety. For instance, websites like Ozone and Walgreens provide many options at affordable prices. This way, I can find good deals without spending too much money.

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例: I usually don't spend much money on shoes because I prefer buying them from online stores like Ozone and Wildberries. These platforms offer affordable prices, making it accessible for everyone to purchase quality footwear.

提案: Ответ содержит грамматические ошибки и повторения. Следует использовать более разнообразную лексику и улучшить структуру предложения для естественности.

例: I prefer comfortable shoes because comfort is very important to me. For example, I don't understand why some people choose fashionable shoes like high heels since they can be quite uncomfortable to wear.

× You can choose what you want and wear it on you.

✓ You can choose what you want and wear it on yourself.

The reflexive pronoun 'yourself' should be used after the verb 'wear' to indicate that the action is done to the subject. Using 'on you' is incorrect in this context.

× Also, I often go to the shops with my family because it's really good opportunity to have something new.

✓ Also, I often go to the shops with my family because it's a really good opportunity to have something new.

The noun 'opportunity' is countable and singular here, so it requires the indefinite article 'a' before it.

× There you can buy different things like clovers, shoes and products.

✓ There you can buy different things like clothes, shoes and products.

The word 'clovers' is incorrect in this context; the correct word is 'clothes'. This is a vocabulary error rather than grammar, but it affects clarity.

× And in my opinion, it's really good opportunity to have something more for the few and not big price.

✓ And in my opinion, it's a really good opportunity to get more for a small price.

Again, 'opportunity' needs the article 'a'. Also, the phrase 'for the few and not big price' is awkward and incorrect; 'for a small price' is the correct expression.

× I don't spend a lot of money for shoes because I like to order shoes in online markets like Ozone and Wildberries where you can buy shoes on not very high price and in my opinion it's available for everyone.

✓ I don't spend a lot of money on shoes because I like to order shoes from online markets like Ozone and Wildberries where you can buy shoes at a reasonable price and in my opinion it's available for everyone.

The correct preposition with 'spend' is 'on' not 'for'. Also, 'order shoes from' is more appropriate than 'in online markets'. The phrase 'on not very high price' should be 'at a reasonable price'.

× I prefer comfortable shoes because it's really important for me to go with the comfort because I don't understand the people who are wear fashionable food shoes like high heels.

✓ I prefer comfortable shoes because it's really important for me to be comfortable because I don't understand the people who wear fashionable shoes like high heels.

The phrase 'to go with the comfort' is incorrect; 'to be comfortable' is correct. Also, 'who are wear' is incorrect; it should be 'who wear'. The word 'food' is a mistake and should be removed.

× In my opinion, it's really uncomfortable and I don't understand these people at all.

✓ In my opinion, they are really uncomfortable and I don't understand these people at all.

The pronoun 'it' is incorrect here because it refers to shoes in plural; 'they' is the correct pronoun for plural nouns like 'shoes'.