Shoes— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答が少し冗長で文法的にも不自然な部分があります。より自然で簡潔な表現を心がけ、文を完結させることが重要です。例えば、頻度を明確に述べ、理由を簡潔に説明しましょう。

例: Yes, I like buying shoes, but since I don't have much money, I usually buy them once or twice a year. However, I enjoy looking for shoes that I like.

提案: 文法の誤りと繰り返しがあり、意味が伝わりにくいです。オンライン購入の経験を明確に述べ、返品ポリシーについても簡潔に説明しましょう。

例: Yes, I often buy shoes online. Before purchasing, I always check if the website allows returns or refunds.

提案: 金額の表現が不明瞭で、文が途中で終わっています。はっきりとした金額を述べ、予算の制限についても簡潔に説明しましょう。

例: I usually spend about 20,000 to 30,000 yen on shoes because I can't afford expensive ones.

提案: 文が不完全で繰り返しもあります。好みの理由を明確に述べ、購入時の注意点を簡潔に説明しましょう。

例: I prefer comfortable shoes because I like walking a lot. When I buy shoes, I always make sure they don't hurt my feet.

× I like buying shoes but I don't have much money to spend for buying shoes so I buy shoes maybe once a year or twice a year.

✓ I like buying shoes but I don't have much money to spend on buying shoes so I buy shoes maybe once or twice a year.

The preposition 'for' is incorrectly used after 'spend'. The correct preposition to use with 'spend' when referring to money is 'on'. Therefore, 'spend for buying shoes' should be corrected to 'spend on buying shoes'.

× But I love looking for shoes I like so every.

✓ But I love looking for shoes I like, so every time I...

The sentence is incomplete and lacks proper structure. It ends abruptly with 'so every.' which is unclear. A complete sentence should be formed to express the intended meaning clearly, such as 'so every time I...'.

× Yes I have. I usually buy shoes online and when I buy a shoes I check the site is available to refund refund return so.

✓ Yes, I have. I usually buy shoes online and when I buy shoes, I check if the site allows refunds or returns.

The article 'a' is incorrectly used before the plural noun 'shoes'. 'Shoes' is plural and does not require 'a'. Also, the sentence is awkward and repetitive ('refund refund return so'). It should be corrected for clarity and grammar. Additionally, a comma is needed after 'Yes' and 'shoes' should not have 'a' before it.

× I usually spend umm. At at 2 2002 ¥220,000 for shoes. I can't buy expensive shoes but.

✓ I usually spend, umm, about ¥220,000 on shoes. I can't buy expensive shoes though.

The phrase 'At at 2 2002 ¥220,000' is unclear and likely a misstatement. 'At at' is redundant and '2 2002' seems incorrect. The preposition 'on' is appropriate with 'spend'. Also, 'but' at the end is incomplete; 'though' is more suitable here to complete the thought.

× I prefer comfortable shoes 'cause I like walking walking, so the. When I buy your shoes, I always. Check the IT it it's don't hurt my.

✓ I prefer comfortable shoes because I like walking. When I buy shoes, I always check that they don't hurt me.

The sentence contains repeated words ('walking walking'), incomplete phrases ('so the.'), incorrect pronouns ('your shoes' instead of 'shoes'), and fragmented sentences. 'Cause' should be expanded to 'because' for formality. The phrase 'Check the IT it it's don't hurt my' is grammatically incorrect and unclear; it should be corrected to 'check that they don't hurt me'.