Shoes— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is generally relevant but contains some grammatical errors and awkward phrasing, such as "transform outfit" (should be "transform an outfit") and "latest chance" (likely meant "latest trends"). Also, the sentence is quite long and could be split for clarity. Try to use more precise vocabulary and correct collocations.

例: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes because they can completely transform an outfit. I often buy shoes every month to keep up with the latest trends. I prefer shopping online because there is a wide variety available.

提案: There are some vocabulary mistakes such as "borrow" instead of "browse" and "sneaker" should be plural or singular consistently. Also, the sentence structure is a bit disjointed and lacks linking words. Try to use linking words to connect ideas and check word choice carefully.

例: Yes, I have bought shoes online because it is very convenient. I can browse a wide variety of styles and brands. Recently, I bought a pair of sneakers that fit perfectly. Additionally, I enjoy reading online reviews to help me make informed decisions.

提案: Your answer has some grammatical errors and unclear phrases, such as "connecting different designed house" which is confusing. Also, the last sentence is incomplete. Try to clarify your ideas and complete your sentences. Use linking words to connect your points logically.

例: Actually, I spend quite a bit on shoes because I believe investing in high-quality footwear is worthwhile since they last longer. Additionally, I prefer buying shoes from different designer brands for various occasions, such as work, parties, and sports.

提案: Your answer is clear and relevant but contains some repetition ("but some but some") and minor grammatical errors ("different situation" should be "different situations"). Try to avoid repetition and use plural forms where appropriate. Also, use linking words to improve coherence.

例: My preference depends on the situation. For example, for work or outings, I opt for comfortable shoes, but for special occasions or events, I choose fashionable shoes. I strive to balance comfort and style, and fortunately, some brands offer both, which is ideal for me.

× Yes, I enjoy buying shoes because they can completely transform outfit and I often buy shoes every month to keep up with the latest chance and I prefer to shop online due to a wide variety available.

✓ Yes, I enjoy buying shoes because they can completely transform an outfit and I often buy shoes every month to keep up with the latest chance and I prefer to shop online due to a wide variety available.

The word 'outfit' is singular and needs an article 'an' before it to be grammatically correct. Without the article, the sentence is incomplete and sounds unnatural.

× Yes, I enjoy buying shoes because they can completely transform outfit and I often buy shoes every month to keep up with the latest chance and I prefer to shop online due to a wide variety available.

✓ Yes, I enjoy buying shoes because they can completely transform an outfit and I often buy shoes every month to keep up with the latest trends and I prefer to shop online due to a wide variety available.

The word 'chance' is incorrect in this context; the correct word is 'trends' to indicate the latest styles or fashions. Using the correct preposition and noun improves clarity.

× Yes, I have bought shoes online. I found it convenient because I can borrow a wide variety of style and brands.

✓ Yes, I have bought shoes online. I found it convenient because I can browse a wide variety of styles and brands.

The verb 'borrow' is incorrect here; the correct verb is 'browse' when referring to looking through options. Also, 'style' should be plural 'styles' to match 'brands' and indicate multiple types.

× Recently I bought a pair of sneaker uh, they perfectly fit and I enjoy reading review online to help me make some informed decisions.

✓ Recently I bought a pair of sneakers, they perfectly fit and I enjoy reading reviews online to help me make some informed decisions.

The word 'sneaker' should be plural 'sneakers' because it refers to a pair. Also, 'review' should be plural 'reviews' because multiple reviews are usually read to make decisions.

× Recently I bought a pair of sneaker uh, they perfectly fit and I enjoy reading review online to help me make some informed decisions.

✓ Recently I bought a pair of sneakers; they fit perfectly and I enjoy reading reviews online to help me make informed decisions.

The phrase 'they perfectly fit' is awkward; the correct order is 'they fit perfectly' to follow standard English adverb placement. Also, 'some' before 'informed decisions' is unnecessary.

× Actually, I spent quite a bit on shoes because I believe in investing in higher quality footwear which is worthwhile and lasts longer.

✓ Actually, I spend quite a bit on shoes because I believe in investing in higher quality footwear which is worthwhile and lasts longer.

The question asks about usual spending, so present tense 'spend' is appropriate instead of past tense 'spent' to indicate habitual action.

× Additionally, I prefer connecting different designed house for different occasions such as work, work parties, sports and.

✓ Additionally, I prefer collecting different designed shoes for different occasions such as work, work parties, sports, and more.

The phrase 'connecting different designed house' is incorrect. The intended meaning is likely 'collecting different designed shoes'. Also, 'house' is incorrect; 'shoes' fits the context. The list is incomplete and should end properly.

× Additionally, I prefer connecting different designed house for different occasions such as work, work parties, sports and.

✓ Additionally, I prefer collecting differently designed shoes for different occasions such as work, work parties, sports, and more.

The adjective 'different designed' should be 'differently designed' to correctly modify 'shoes'. Also, 'shoes' should be plural to match the context.

× My preference depends on different situation. For example, for work or outings I opt for comfortable shoes but for special occasions or events I go for fashion shoes.

✓ My preference depends on different situations. For example, for work or outings I opt for comfortable shoes but for special occasions or events I go for fashionable shoes.

The word 'situation' should be plural 'situations' to match 'different'. Also, 'fashion shoes' is incorrect; the adjective form 'fashionable shoes' is appropriate.

× My preference depends on different situation. For example, for work or outings I opt for comfortable shoes but for special occasions or events I go for fashion shoes.

✓ My preference depends on different situations. For example, for work or outings I opt for comfortable shoes but for special occasions or events I go for fashionable shoes.

The noun 'fashion' is incorrectly used as an adjective. The correct adjective is 'fashionable' to describe shoes.

× I strive to balance comfort and style but some but some brands have both which is ideal for me.

✓ I strive to balance comfort and style, and some brands have both which is ideal for me.

The phrase 'but some but some' is a repetition and incorrect. Using 'and' connects the ideas properly. Also, a comma before 'and' improves readability.