Shoes— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is generally clear and relevant, but it could be more concise and structured. Try to start with a direct response to the question, then add supporting details using linking words to improve coherence.

例: Yes, I like buying shoes quite a lot. In fact, I usually buy new shoes every few months because I enjoy updating my wardrobe with the latest styles.

提案: Your answer addresses the question but contains a typo ('food' instead of 'foot') and could be more natural. Also, adding a linking phrase would improve flow and clarity.

例: No, I haven't bought shoes online because my foot size is quite large for a woman, so I'm worried that the shoes might not fit properly.

提案: Your answer provides some information but lacks clarity and coherence. Avoid vague phrases like 'something like that' and try to organize your ideas logically with linking words.

例: I usually spend at least $1000 on a pair of shoes. Therefore, I might spend around $5000 on shoes in total, as I have a very large wardrobe.

提案: Your answer is relevant but could be clearer and more concise. Use linking words to connect ideas and correct minor grammatical errors for better fluency.

例: I prefer shoes that are both fashionable and comfortable. For example, my favorite shoes are Balenciaga's Rock, and I own several pairs in different colors because they combine style with comfort.

× I buy new shoes every several months.

✓ I buy new shoes every several months.

The phrase 'every several months' is awkward and ungrammatical. It should be 'every few months' or 'every several months' is not standard English. However, since the instruction is to correct only grammar mistakes listed, and 'every several months' is more of a usage issue, no correction is made here.

× No, because my food size is too big for a girl and I don't know if my size will fit.

✓ No, because my foot size is too big for a girl and I don't know if my size will fit.

The word 'food' is a typo and should be 'foot' to correctly refer to shoe size. This is a pronoun/word misuse error.

× Well one pair of my shoes costs minimum $1000 so I can spend all my money like $5000 and something like that.

✓ Well, one pair of my shoes costs a minimum of $1000, so I can spend all my money, like $5000 or something like that.

The phrase 'costs minimum $1000' is incorrect; it should be 'costs a minimum of $1000'. Also, adding commas improves clarity. The plural 'shoes' is correct here as 'pair of shoes' is singular.

× I have really big wardrobe.

✓ I have a really big wardrobe.

The sentence is missing the indefinite article 'a' before 'really big wardrobe'. 'Wardrobe' is a singular countable noun and requires an article.

× I have several pair of this brand but another colors and it is both fashionable and comfortable.

✓ I have several pairs of this brand but in other colors, and they are both fashionable and comfortable.

The word 'pair' should be plural 'pairs' when preceded by 'several'. 'Another colors' is incorrect; it should be 'other colors'. Also, 'it is' should be 'they are' to agree with the plural subject 'pairs'.