Shoes— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and unclear, which affects the natural flow and effectiveness. Try to give a direct response first, then add specific details without repeating the same information. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes because I am interested in fashion. I usually visit shoe stores twice a week, but I only buy new shoes about once a month. It's always fun for me to find new styles that match my outfits.

提案: Your answer is clear but contains some hesitations and minor grammar issues. Try to use more precise vocabulary and avoid filler words. Also, use linking words to make your answer more coherent.

例: No, I have never bought shoes online because I prefer to try them on first. It's important for me to check the fit and comfort in person to avoid wasting time and money on unsuitable shoes.

提案: Your answer is unclear and incomplete, with many hesitations and repetitions. Try to organize your thoughts before speaking, give a clear topic sentence, and provide specific details. Avoid filler sounds and incomplete sentences.

例: The amount I spend on shoes depends on my budget. Usually, I spend around 10,000 yen on a pair. However, if there is a special occasion, I might spend more to get a nicer pair.

提案: Your answer addresses the question but has some grammar mistakes and hesitations. Try to use linking words to connect your ideas and provide clear reasons for your preferences. Also, avoid repeating words unnecessarily.

例: I prefer fashionable shoes because I am interested in style. However, when I play sports like basketball, I choose comfortable shoes that help me perform better on the court.

× How often I like to buy any shoes?

✓ How often do I like to buy shoes?

The original sentence is structured incorrectly for a question in English. Questions typically require auxiliary verbs like 'do' for the present simple tense. Also, 'any' is unnecessary here and 'shoes' is plural, so 'shoes' is correct.

× I often go to the shoes shop to buy shoes

✓ I often go to the shoe shop to buy shoes

The phrase 'shoes shop' is incorrect; the correct form is 'shoe shop' as 'shoe' acts as an adjective describing the type of shop.

× But I want you. I go to shoes shop, but twice a week, But I, uh, got new shoes.

✓ But I want to say, I go to the shoe shop twice a week, and I get new shoes.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. 'I want you' is incorrect; it should be 'I want to say'. Also, 'shoes shop' should be 'shoe shop'. The sentence needs to be connected properly for clarity.

× I get new shoes once a month, but it's really fun for me.

✓ I get new shoes once a month, and it's really fun for me.

The conjunction 'but' is incorrectly used here; 'and' is more appropriate to connect these positive statements.

× I've never bought shoes online because I wanna try before buying.

✓ I've never bought shoes online because I want to try them before buying.

'Wanna' is informal and should be replaced with 'want to' in formal speech. Also, 'try' should be followed by an object 'them' referring to shoes.

× So I go to the shoe stores and I want to try it on and how how fit it is for me or not.

✓ So I go to the shoe stores and I want to try them on to see how well they fit me or not.

The pronoun 'it' is incorrect because 'shoes' is plural; 'them' should be used. Also, the sentence structure is awkward and needs rephrasing for clarity.

× So it's really important to try it on 'cause I don't wanna uh, waste my time money on.

✓ So it's really important to try them on because I don't want to waste my time and money.

The phrase 'waste my time money on' is incorrect; 'waste my time and money' is the correct expression. Also, 'it' should be 'them' for plural shoes.

× It depends on my budget, but sometimes when I have, sometimes I, when I don't have money, I don't wanna, I don't wanna buy shoes, but uh, when I buy shoes, uh, uh, ice pen, UH1UH-10 thousand ¥10,000 uh, around ¥10,000 to the shoe shoes, but uh, when I have, when I have a special day, I.

✓ It depends on my budget. Sometimes, when I don't have money, I don't want to buy shoes. But when I buy shoes, I spend around ¥10,000. Also, when I have a special day, I...

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. It needs to be broken into clear sentences. 'Ice pen, UH1UH-10 thousand' is unclear and omitted. 'The shoe shoes' is incorrect; 'shoes' is sufficient.

× I'm a fashion person, I'm interested in so past fashion, so I prefer to fashionable, uh, shoes,

✓ I'm a fashion person; I'm interested in past fashion, so I prefer fashionable shoes.

The phrase 'so past fashion' is unclear; likely meant 'past fashion'. 'Prefer to fashionable shoes' is incorrect; it should be 'prefer fashionable shoes' without 'to'.

× sometimes I prefer to, uh, comfortable shoes for in terms of sports,

✓ Sometimes I prefer comfortable shoes in terms of sports,

The phrase 'prefer to comfortable shoes' is incorrect; 'prefer comfortable shoes' is correct. Also, 'for in terms of sports' is redundant; 'in terms of sports' suffices.

× I, when I, uh, play basketball, I prefer to comfortable shoes, uh, basketball shoes to, uh, play.

✓ When I play basketball, I prefer comfortable basketball shoes to play well.

The original sentence is fragmented and awkward. 'Prefer to comfortable shoes' is incorrect; it should be 'prefer comfortable shoes'. The sentence is restructured for clarity.

× Well, yeah, it's really helped me to play.

✓ Well, yeah, it really helps me play.

'Helped me to play' is past tense, but the context suggests a general statement, so present tense 'helps me play' is better. Also, 'help me play' is more natural than 'help me to play'.