Shoes— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答は意味が伝わりますが、英語の自然な表現や文法に改善の余地があります。例えば、「I often purchase in three months」は「I often buy shoes every three months」のように表現すると自然です。また、「film and so on」は意味が不明瞭なので、具体的なブランド名や種類を挙げると良いでしょう。

例: Yes, I like buying shoes. I usually buy new shoes every three months. For example, I often choose popular brands like Adidas or Nike because they are comfortable and stylish.

提案: 回答は内容が伝わりますが、文法や表現の自然さを向上させる必要があります。例えば、「bought shoes in online」は「bought shoes online」に修正し、「It it is very good for me」は「It is very convenient for me」と言い換えると良いでしょう。また、理由を述べる際に接続詞を使うとより論理的になります。

例: Yes, I have. I recently bought shoes online from Amazon. It is very convenient for me because the delivery only takes two days, which is very fast.

提案: 金額の表現が不明瞭で、文法的にも誤りがあります。例えば、「1 or 10,000」は具体的な金額に直し、「the branch was very very convenient for us to last years」は意味が不明瞭なので削除または修正が必要です。より明確で簡潔な表現を心がけましょう。

例: I usually spend about 10,000 yen on shoes. Although they are quite expensive, I think it's worth it because the shoes are comfortable and last a long time.

提案: 理由の説明が不明瞭で文法的な誤りがあります。「if there are no comfortable」は「if they are not comfortable」に修正し、「I will not put on the shoes where whatever the shoes is very fast fashionable」は意味が通じるように言い換える必要があります。より明確で自然な表現を使いましょう。

例: I prefer comfortable shoes because if they are not comfortable, I won't wear them, even if they are very fashionable.

× I often purchase in three months.

✓ I often purchase shoes every three months.

The original sentence lacks a clear time expression and object for the verb 'purchase'. Adding 'shoes' clarifies the object, and 'every three months' correctly expresses the frequency. This corrects the present tense usage and sentence clarity.

× Every three months I often buy brand shoes such as Adidas and film and so on.

✓ Every three months I often buy brand shoes such as Adidas and FILA, and so on.

The word 'film' seems to be a typo or incorrect brand name; it should be 'FILA', a known shoe brand. Also, 'brand shoes' is correct as plural. Correcting the brand name improves clarity and accuracy.

× I recently bought shoes in online or the online store is Amazon.

✓ I recently bought shoes online; the online store is Amazon.

The preposition 'in' is incorrect before 'online'. The correct phrase is 'bought shoes online'. Also, the sentence structure is improved by separating into two clauses with a semicolon for clarity.

× It it is very good for me because it's delivered in two days.

✓ It is very good for me because it's delivered in two days.

There is a repeated word 'It it'. Removing the duplicate corrects the sentence structure and improves readability.

× I usually spend on shoes about 1 or 10,000.

✓ I usually spend about 1,000 to 10,000 on shoes.

The preposition 'on' should come after the amount spent, not before. Also, the amount is clarified as a range '1,000 to 10,000' for better understanding.

× It is very expensive but the branch was very very convenient for us to last years.

✓ It is very expensive, but the brand was very convenient for us over the last years.

'Branch' is incorrect; it should be 'brand'. Also, 'to last years' is incorrect; 'over the last years' is the correct phrase. Adding a comma before 'but' improves sentence flow.

× This is because if there are no comfortable, I will not put on the shoes where whatever the shoes is very fast fashionable.

✓ This is because if they are not comfortable, I will not wear the shoes, no matter how fashionable they are.

'There are no comfortable' is incorrect; it should be 'they are not comfortable'. 'Put on the shoes where whatever the shoes is very fast fashionable' is unclear and grammatically incorrect. Rephrasing to 'I will not wear the shoes, no matter how fashionable they are' corrects pronoun use and sentence clarity.