Shoes— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to reduce hesitation sounds like 'uh' and avoid redundancy. Structure your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details using linking words. For example, say: "Yes, I like buying shoes, but I only buy them occasionally when I really need them. Also, I consider my budget before purchasing."

例: Yes, I like buying shoes, but I only buy them occasionally when I really need them. Also, I consider my budget before purchasing.

提案: Improve clarity and grammar. Use linking words to connect ideas logically. For example, say: "Yes, I often buy shoes online because there is a wide variety available. Moreover, I can read customer reviews to help me choose. Last time, I bought a pair that fit me very well."

例: Yes, I often buy shoes online because there is a wide variety available. Moreover, I can read customer reviews to help me choose. Last time, I bought a pair that fit me very well.

提案: Avoid hesitation and improve sentence structure. Use linking words to explain your reasons clearly. For example: "I usually spend a moderate amount on shoes because I look for good quality. Also, I prefer to buy shoes only when I really need them."

例: I usually spend a moderate amount on shoes because I look for good quality. Also, I prefer to buy shoes only when I really need them.

提案: Improve grammar and sentence flow. Use linking words to explain your preference clearly. For example: "It depends on the situation. For work or special occasions, I prefer comfortable shoes because I walk a lot. Therefore, comfort is more important to me."

例: It depends on the situation. For work or special occasions, I prefer comfortable shoes because I walk a lot. Therefore, comfort is more important to me.

× I occasionally, uh, buy a shoes when, uh, I really need the shoes

✓ I occasionally, uh, buy shoes when, uh, I really need the shoes

The word 'shoes' is plural, so the article 'a' should not be used before it. Use 'shoes' without 'a' to indicate plural correctly.

× I buy a shoes for work or occasional youth I buy a comfortable shoes

✓ I buy shoes for work or occasional use I buy comfortable shoes

The word 'shoes' is plural, so the article 'a' should not be used before it. Also, 'occasional youth' seems incorrect; it should be 'occasional use' to make sense.

× last time I bought a shoes online and that is very fit for

✓ last time I bought shoes online and they fit very well

The word 'shoes' is plural, so 'a' should not be used. Also, 'that is very fit for' is incorrect; it should be 'they fit very well' to describe the shoes fitting properly.

× I buy shoes online because in online shops there are various and different type of shoes

✓ I buy shoes online because in online shops there are various and different types of shoes

The phrase 'type of shoes' should be plural 'types of shoes' to agree with 'various and different' which implies multiple types.

× I looking for a quality and quantity

✓ I am looking for quality and quantity

The verb 'looking' needs the auxiliary verb 'am' to form the present continuous tense correctly.

× I buy a comfortable shoes because I walking a lot when I'm working

✓ I buy comfortable shoes because I walk a lot when I'm working

'Shoes' is plural, so 'a' should be removed. Also, 'I walking' is incorrect; it should be 'I walk' to match the present tense.

× I walking a lot when I'm working and it's I prefer to use comfortable

✓ I walk a lot when I'm working and I prefer to use comfortable shoes

The verb 'walking' should be 'walk' to match the present tense. Also, 'it's I prefer to use comfortable' is incomplete; it should be 'I prefer to use comfortable shoes' for clarity.