Shoes— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 直接的に質問に答え、文を整理して自然な流れにすること。話の冒頭で簡潔に答え（Yes/No＋頻度）、その後で理由を一つか二つ加えるとよいです。填充語（uh, um）を減らし、文法（時制や語順）を正すこと。例："I usually buy shoes about once a year because I wear them until they are worn out."のようにする。

例: I usually buy shoes about once a year because I wear them until they are worn out. For example, I only replace my work shoes when the soles or heels become uncomfortable, so I don’t shop for shoes very often.

提案: 否定の表現と助動詞の使い方を正しくし、理由を明確に述べること。現在完了の否定形は "I haven't bought" とする。理由を述べる際は接続詞（because, so）を使って文をつなぐと自然です。店での試着が重要な理由（フィット感やサイズ確認）を具体的に付け加えると良い。

例: No, I haven't bought shoes online because I prefer to try them on in the store. Trying them on helps me check the fit and comfort, which is especially important for long work days.

提案: 金額と用途を明確に分け、繰り返しや不要な言葉を省くこと。複数の種類の靴について話す場合は、リンク語（for, and, also）を使って論理的に接続する。例："I usually spend about ¥4,000 on work leather shoes, but I spend around ¥20,000 on hiking boots because they need to be durable."のように。

例: I usually spend about ¥4,000 on leather shoes for work. However, I sometimes spend around ¥20,000 on hiking boots because they need to be more durable and provide better support.

提案: 理由を具体的に述べて文を整理すること。繰り返しを避け、なぜ快適さを重視するか（歩きやすさ、長時間使用、健康面など）を一つか二つ挙げると説得力が増します。接続詞（because, so）や例を加えると良い。

例: I prefer comfortable shoes because I walk a lot during the day and need good support. For instance, comfortable sneakers let me stand and commute without getting sore feet.

× Where I don't usually buy shoes, I buy shoes about once a year because I use shoes until they uh. They are broken.

✓ I don't usually buy shoes; I buy them about once a year because I use them until they are broken.

The original sentence has incorrect word order and redundant phrasing. Use 'I don't usually buy shoes' as the main clause, then a semicolon or conjunction, and replace repeated nouns with pronouns 'them' to avoid repetition. Maintain present simple tense for habits. Suggestion: Keep subject-verb order 'I don't usually buy' and use pronouns to refer back to nouns.

× No, I have I haven't buy shoes online that is because, uh, I like buying shoes after trying them on at the store and.

✓ No, I haven't bought shoes online because I like to buy shoes after trying them on at the store.

The speaker attempted to use present perfect but used incorrect forms and duplicated auxiliaries. Use 'haven't bought' (present perfect with past participle) to indicate experience up to now. Also 'because' should connect clauses and 'like to buy' or 'like buying' are both acceptable; 'and' at the end is incomplete. Suggestion: Use 'I haven't bought' for negative present perfect and complete the clause after 'because'.

× I usually spend about ¥4000 on my leather shoes for work, and I also buy sometimes buy shoes, hiking, hiking shoes. Uh, that is about ¥20,000.

✓ I usually spend about ¥4,000 on my leather work shoes, and sometimes I buy hiking shoes for about ¥20,000.

The original has word order problems and repetition. Place adverbs like 'sometimes' before the main verb 'buy'. Combine adjectives properly ('leather work shoes') and avoid repeating words. Use consistent number formatting and place the price after the item. Suggestion: Use natural adjective order and correct placement of adverbs: 'sometimes I buy hiking shoes'.

× I prefer comfortable shoes because I I'm not very interested in fashionable shoes fashion interesting fashion.

✓ I prefer comfortable shoes because I'm not very interested in fashionable ones.

Original contains stuttering and repetition. Replace repeated noun phrase with pronoun or 'ones' to avoid repetition. Contraction 'I'm' is fine; ensure sentence completes the idea. Suggestion: Use 'fashionable ones' to refer back to 'shoes' without repeating the noun.