Shoes— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Give a direct topic sentence that answers frequency clearly, then add one concise reason or habit detail. Avoid vague phrases like “when I feel good” without context. Use linking words (for example, “usually” or “often”) and keep to 1–3 short sentences.

例: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes and I usually shop for them every few months. I like to treat myself after finishing a big project or when I need something practical, such as new trainers for exercise.

提案: Start with a clear statement (yes/no and when), then give two specific details: the brand, the reason (sale), and the price—use correct grammar and numbers. Use a linking word to connect ideas (for example, “because” or “so”). Avoid fillers and unclear symbols.

例: Yes, I bought a pair of Nike shoes online about two months ago because there was a big sale. I paid around $20, which was a great deal for that brand.

提案: Give a clear typical amount (weekly/monthly/yearly) and explain why briefly. Be realistic and grammatically correct: use present simple for habits and avoid hesitations (“umm”). Keep it concise (1–2 sentences). If the amount is large, clarify the period (per year).

例: I usually spend about $200 to $300 a year on shoes because I enjoy collecting different styles. I tend to buy a few pairs for work and a few more for casual wear.

提案: Answer directly which you prefer and give one or two clear, specific reasons with correct vocabulary. Use linking words (for example, “because” and “for example”) and avoid unclear metaphors (“another hand”, “fruits”). Keep to 1–3 concise sentences.

例: I prefer comfortable shoes because I walk a lot and need good support. For example, I wear cushioned trainers to the gym to avoid foot pain and reduce the risk of injury.

× To be honest, yes I do when I feel good or in a good mood.

✓ To be honest, yes I do when I feel good or when I am in a good mood.

The sentence mixes present simple with an adjective phrase; add 'when I am' to form a complete clause and keep present-tense consistency. Use 'when I am in a good mood' rather than 'in a good mood' alone to make the clause grammatically complete.

× I bought shoes in two months ago.

✓ I bought shoes two months ago.

The phrase 'in two months ago' is incorrect because 'ago' already places the action in the past and does not require the preposition 'in'. Remove 'in' to form the correct past-tense time expression 'two months ago'.

× It was Nike shoes and remarkable sale.

✓ They were Nike shoes and they were on a remarkable sale.

The original sentence has subject-number mismatch and missing verbs. 'Nike shoes' is plural so use 'they were'. Also add 'they were on a remarkable sale' to clarify the relationship; this fixes sentence structure and verb usage.

× I bought maybe around 20 bucks #.

✓ I bought them for around 20 bucks.

The original mixes 'bought' without an object and uses awkward modifiers. Include the object ('them') and the preposition 'for' with the amount. Remove unnecessary words like 'maybe' or place them appropriately (e.g., 'for maybe around 20 bucks') for clarity.

× Actually I spent roughly $2000 just for shopping umm because I have a lot of shoes and I enjoy to shopping and buy some shoes.

✓ Actually I spent roughly $2000 just on shopping because I have a lot of shoes and I enjoy shopping and buying shoes.

Mixed tenses and incorrect verb forms: 'spent' is past but the rest should be consistent; 'just for shopping' is better as 'just on shopping'; 'enjoy to shopping' is incorrect — 'enjoy' should be followed by a gerund ('enjoy shopping'). Use parallel gerunds 'shopping and buying' for clarity.

× I enjoy to shopping and buy some shoes.

✓ I enjoy shopping and buying shoes.

After verbs like 'enjoy' use the -ing (gerund) form ('enjoy shopping'), not the infinitive 'to shopping'. Also use parallel gerunds for both actions ('shopping and buying').

× Sometimes I prefer uh, comfortable shoes because you need to be comfort when you want to walk another hand.

✓ Sometimes I prefer comfortable shoes because you need to be comfortable when you want to walk a long way.

Multiple errors: 'be comfort' should be 'be comfortable' (correct adjective), 'another hand' is incorrect and unclear — perhaps intended 'a long way' or 'for long walks'. Adjust vocabulary and structure to convey meaning clearly.

× If you wanted to go to gym, you need to have a comfortable shoes for your fruits to to avoid a lot of things.

✓ If you want to go to the gym, you need to have comfortable shoes to avoid many problems.

Use present tense for general advice ('If you want'). Include the article 'the' before 'gym'. 'A comfortable shoes' has article-number mismatch; use 'comfortable shoes' or 'a pair of comfortable shoes'. 'For your fruits' is nonsensical here; likely intended 'to avoid many problems' or 'to avoid injuries'. Remove repeated 'to'.

× you need to have a comfortable shoes

✓ you need to have comfortable shoes

The noun 'shoes' is plural, so it should not be used with the singular article 'a'. Either use 'a pair of comfortable shoes' or omit the article and say 'comfortable shoes'. This corrects number agreement.