Shoes— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make your response more concise and correct small grammar issues. Start with a clear topic sentence, then briefly explain why and give a specific frequency. Use linking words (for example, "because") and correct verb forms.

例: Yes, I like buying shoes. I usually buy new ones about once every two months because I run a lot and my running shoes wear out quickly.

提案: Good content and coherence. Improve by splitting into two short sentences and adding a linking phrase to emphasize reason. Also vary vocabulary slightly (e.g., "range" instead of "selection").

例: Yes, I often buy shoes online because the range in my town is very limited. This way it's easier to find the style and size I need, and I can frequently find better prices.

提案: Correct the factual/number error and grammar. Give a realistic amount and a clear reason. Use proper verb patterns (e.g., "mind buying expensive shoes"). Keep it within 1–2 sentences.

例: I usually spend around $40 to $80 on a pair of shoes because I prefer decent quality for durability, although I sometimes choose cheaper options for casual footwear.

提案: Fix grammar (subject–verb agreement, articles) and avoid filler words like "so". Start with a clear preference sentence, then give two concise reasons with linking words such as "because" and "for example". Use precise vocabulary (e.g., "versatile, supportive").

例: I prefer comfortable shoes to fashionable ones because they are better for my feet and more versatile. For example, comfortable running shoes provide support for exercise and I can wear them for daily activities.

× I usually buy new shoes but once every two months because I wear them a lot for running and they tend to wear out quickly.

✓ I usually buy new shoes once every two months because I wear them a lot for running and they tend to wear out quickly.

Remove the extra conjunction 'but' which creates a redundancy and breaks the sentence flow; this sentence had no plural/singular error but was improved for grammatical correctness and clarity. Suggestion: avoid unnecessary conjunctions so the noun phrases and verbs remain consistent. Grammar problem type ID:1

× Yes I have, I usually buy shoes online because the selection in my town is very limited so it's easier to find the style and size I want and often at better prices.

✓ Yes, I have. I usually buy shoes online because the selection in my town is very limited, so it's easier to find the style and size I want, and I can often find better prices.

Run-on sentence needs separation and correct verb forms. Use a period after 'Yes, I have' to separate responses. Add subject 'I' before 'can often find' to make the verb clause clear. Suggestion: break long sentences into shorter clauses and ensure each clause has an explicit subject and correct verb form. Grammar problem type ID:9

× I usually spend my money about $4.00 because I don't really mind to buy so expensive shoes.

✓ I usually spend about $40.00 because I don't really mind buying expensive shoes.

Several errors: 'spend my money about $4.00' is awkward—use 'spend about $40.00' (assumed intended amount). 'mind to buy' is incorrect; after 'mind' use gerund 'buying'. 'so expensive' should be 'expensive' without 'so' before a noun. Suggestion: use the gerund after 'mind' and place quantifier directly before the amount. Grammar problem type ID:11

× I think comfortable shoes is so better than fashionable shoes because it's so healthy and you can use every time and you can running with them for exercise or workout.

✓ I think comfortable shoes are much better than fashionable ones because they are healthier, you can wear them all the time, and you can run in them for exercise or working out.

Multiple issues corrected: subject-verb agreement ('shoes are' not 'shoes is'), 'so better' incorrect—use 'much better', 'it's so healthy' unclear—use plural 'they are healthier', 'you can use every time' should be 'wear them all the time', and 'you can running with them' must be 'run in them' or 'use them for running' (use base verb after modal/can). Suggestion: ensure subject and verb agree, choose appropriate intensifiers (much rather than so), use correct verb forms after modals, and use accurate collocations (wear shoes, run in shoes). Grammar problem type ID:13

× I usually buy new shoes but once every two months because I wear them a lot for running and they tend to wear out quickly.

✓ I usually buy new shoes once every two months because I wear them a lot for running and they tend to wear out quickly.

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