Shoes— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答要更简洁且更自然，注意句子流畅与语法（例如“when I need them”而不是“when I need it”）。开头直接回应问题，然后用一到两句具体说明频率和原因，避免重复。可以使用连接词如“so”或“because”来增强连贯性。

例: Not really. I only buy shoes when I need them, such as when my old pair is worn out. So I usually buy shoes maybe once every one or two years, unless I find a special deal.

提案: 注意避免填塞词和重复（例如“find a very and I can find a very”）。把观点按两三点清晰列出并用连接词连接，如“because”/“and”/“also”。提高词汇准确性，如“good deals”或“wide range of styles”。

例: Yes, I do. I usually buy shoes online because it's convenient and I can find good deals. Also, online stores offer a wider range of styles than local shops.

提案: 回答要更精确并注意数词和名词的单复数（例如“1000 to 2000 NT dollars”，“buying shoes”）。给出频率或比较可以更有说服力，连接词如“because”/“so”要合理使用。

例: I usually spend about 1,000 to 2,000 NT dollars on a pair of shoes because I don't think it's worth spending more. I prefer to use extra money for things like books or investments.

提案: 表达要更简洁并避免重复（例如“good support”出现多次、“avoiding avoiding mistake”有重复错误）。先给出直接答案，然后用一两句说明理由并提供具体例子（如跑步或健身时需要的功能）。

例: I prefer comfortable shoes because I exercise regularly. For example, running shoes with good cushioning and arch support help prevent injuries and make workouts more comfortable.

× I only buy shoes when I am when I need it.

✓ I only buy shoes when I need them.

原句中有多余的“am when”导致句子结构混乱，且代词“it”指代“shoes”（复数）不一致。建议去掉多余部分并使用复数代词“them”。

× For example when my old ones were broken or just so then I'll buy a new one.

✓ For example, when my old ones are worn out or broken, I'll buy new ones.

原句连词和结构使用混乱，“were broken or just so”不自然且时态不一致。应使用一般现在时描述习惯性行为（are worn out/broken），并保持代词和名词数一致（new ones）。请在从句前加逗号以更清晰地分隔句子。

× Yes, I have, I almost buy them online every time because it's really convenient and I can find a very and I can find a very good deal with good price.

✓ Yes, I have. I almost always buy them online because it's really convenient and I can find very good deals at good prices.

原句有重复片段“and I can find a very and I can find a very”，导致冗余并且名词单复数及搭配不当（deal应为复数或用a very good deal; price需复数或加修饰）。还要用副词短语“almost always”表示频率。建议删除重复并调整名词单复数及搭配（deals / prices）。

× So and besides that I can have a lot of different kind of style.

✓ Besides that, I can find a lot of different styles.

原句中“a lot of different kind of style”结构错误：应为“a lot of different kinds of style”或更自然的“a lot of different styles”。另外句首“So and”多余，去掉可使表达更简洁。

× I usually spend around 1000 to one 2000 NT dollars because I don't think it's really necessary to spend too much on them.

✓ I usually spend around 1,000 to 2,000 NT dollars because I don't think it's necessary to spend too much on shoes.

数字表达“one 2000”错误，正确写法为“1,000 to 2,000”。另外“on them”模糊，最好明确为“on shoes”。去掉“really”可使语气更简洁，但不是必须。

× Instead I prefer spending my money on more important things, for example buying shoe, buying books or investment in stock.

✓ Instead, I prefer spending my money on more important things, for example buying shoes, buying books, or investing in stocks.

原句中“buying shoe”名词单复数错误（应为shoes），并且“investment in stock”搭配不当，应使用动名词短语“investing in stocks”。需要在列举项目时使用并列结构并保持形式一致。

× I definitely go for comfortable shoes because I like doing exercise, which means I need a good support of shoes that can, uh, have good support on my exercise and avoiding avoiding mistake, avoid injuries.

✓ I definitely prefer comfortable shoes because I like exercising, which means I need shoes that provide good support during exercise to prevent mistakes and avoid injuries.

原句存在多个问题：用词不当（do exercise更自然为exercise或do exercise，但这里用动名词exercising）、短语“a good support of shoes”不自然，应为“shoes that provide good support”，介词“on my exercise”不正确，改为“during exercise”。重复单词“avoiding avoiding mistake”也需改为“to prevent mistakes and avoid injuries”。同时把“go for”改为更自然的“prefer”。